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how to haiku (or senryu, if you prefer)
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how to haiku (or senryu, if you prefer) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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first, one through five here then next, one through seven here last, one through five here 5 5 5 5 5 7 7 7 & 5 5 5 5 5 five syllables here then, seven syllables here five syllables here what, a syllable? here is what syl-la-bles are these are syl-la-bles why do they call these why do they call these haiku? neither hai or ku they are works of art the world collapsed in three lines zen in their spirit ------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 12-04-2001).] |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
hehehe...ummm a haiku is the same thing as a senryu right? I always thought they were the same. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh John, this is soooooo clever, zen always fills the beauty of these poems! (sigh) I love writing senryus especially; you have taught us all so wonderfully in this review poem! (smiles) Sooooooo wonderful, I love it!!! (big hugggssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Yup...thats how to do them, alright  but I've tried them, and they give me just as much of a headache as that monster thingy I was trying wrestle with earlier when posting tonight!  ..but if I might say so, you do them very well, Sir.  Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sven, ya know I read N read these haikus posted in these forums and now I see in your poem how you put it2together (like a master naturally) and still I couldn't do one4the life of me so I guess I shall continue with my reading and maybe one day it'll come2me... Terrific presentation by the way  Hugs2uSweetie *~coco*~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
It's good to see you and to say Hi, coo of you to share your know how I love the senryu and haiku forms Less is more, more or less |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Aack I just got more confused..LOL Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
RosePetal, Sven will get in here eventually, but a Haiku is a 5-7-5 poem based on nature... Webster: "a Japanese verse from, rendered in English as three unrhymed lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables respectively,... often on some subject in nature" While senryu are haiku-like verse, not necessarily about nature.... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 12-05-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Sunshine beats me to it. Well, those are the breaks... Sven, this was cute...  And I have the feeling a few people will learn from it.~Allan "I know it's nice to be known - It caresses your ego - but the society cost is terrible." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sven, Interesting and enjoyed |
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lunatic Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 172 |
Beautiful! Let thy moon arise. William Blake [This message has been edited by lunatic (edited 12-05-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
so that's the secret I never knew that before we gain knowledge here Is that a Senryu? wind blows mightily leaves spin madly on axis stoic tree stands still Is that a Haiku? Did I put the em-FAH-sis on the wrong syl-AH-ble? Fantiastic piece, oh GR8 Voice of the Northland! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I'm still confused...or it could be my cold medicine!  LOL...Nancy"A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
Interesting poem, i loved your explanation here. Very nice! Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
hello everyone. . .  thanks to Sunshine for the definitions. . . yes, a haiku is usually about nature, and a senryu is not about nature. . . that is, if you pay attention to such things. . . there's also a school of thought that says that one need not follow the 5-7-5 form, because the Japanese used to count sounds, and not syllables. . . but, that's for another day. . . thanks. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Love to read your work Haikus are beautiful things. Monkey butternuts. |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
That was cute. Unless, of course, it wasnt meant to be a poem. *Is very tired and needs everything explained to her* Thanks for sharing. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ya know, I kept reading senryus and wondered why I called them Haikus. thanks for clearing that one up.....lmao.....and here I thought I was just being dumb!! On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*giggling* well it is good to be clear on that one. Well said, sweet Sven. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
I've never been one to write haiku well. I've only done it once, and only because the teacher told me to Then she made me rewrite it, because it was too "dark". *sighs* The follies of educators who mean well...^_^ LadySofia |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
ohhhhhhhhhhhh now I know how to write a haiku. count about five here then place seven words next line five we do count here. think I can write haikus now........or was this a senryu........ok......ok.......I am confused now....... but I like your cute explanation Sven.......as always a splendid write  Charisma ~*Theresia~* [This message has been edited by Charisma (edited 12-07-2001).] |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Well...I have never tried that.... perhaps I should..what do you think? A cute nice write..... Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thanks again to everyone. . . you're all wonderful people and poets. . . and, Enchanted Melody, I believe that a haiku from you would be something to see my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Indeed! I luv it you clever thang you! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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