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When Sunlight Falls
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When Sunlight Falls |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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When sunlight falls Behind the walls Of moonlit halls The palest blue I lie awake Trying to break The dreams I make Of me and you When darkness owns With blackened tones And silent phones That never ring I watch the clock And try to block Each tick and tock That silence brings When colors fade To thoughts replayed And wishes made Upon a star I sit and fight The very night That shows no light But who we are |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This reads so quickly Kevin, the way you put it down on the page pushes the pace like the constant forward movement of time. Well done. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
I love the speed of this write.it flows well. Peaches |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Yesh, I agree that this poem seems to depict the passing of time. The pace is fast. But it seems you're waiting for something, or someone? Shouldn't time be 'crawling' when you're waiting? I don't know about you, but that happens to me...  It feels like ages when I have to wait... Truth be told, i HAVE been waiting for ages. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
like time, this flies... in steady pace... regards, sudhir |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Very good, Kevin.... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kevin~ I adore this~ Love the flight of inspired thought you took~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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