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With These Words, I Forgive
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With These Words, I Forgive |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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and I must hold my breath for you are so much in the air around me that the next gulp I take of you may bring me to tears and biting words and I do not want to bite you so I hold my breath in the air that leaps with you hoping a steady head will quell a sudden onslaught of broken sighs and I am just one single heart holding one single thread of hope trying not to sink when the sting of your voice slashes and trying not to fall from concsiousness from the lack of your smile. so I hold my breath in air that tingles with you hoping a steady patience will cover us both. Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since [This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 12-02-2001).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is amazing Jenn...with so much pain and heartache! |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Very heartwrenching write, but good. Peaches |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Jennifer, I know just how you feel; sometimes I just have the heart to forgive but I don't want to feel burdened by a voice like that, and it wrenches my heart so deeply where I can't think clearly. (sigh) Very powerfully expressed poem, sweet friend, we all love you so very much! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Temptress, Enjoyed the read. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
heartwrenched penned, straith from your heart. enjoyed it very much! ((hugs)) Charisma ~*Theresia~* |
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Ocean Beauty Junior Member
since 2001-11-24
Posts 18VT, USA |
I love the words you used to help get your message across. Very aggressive, I really liked it a lot. ~Dawn~ |
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Joe Lamando Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 124Massachusetts,USA |
Very well expressed! In situations like you have described, patience and forgiving aren't always the best path. It's wise to break the mood and change the subject. So how's the family? Joe |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you find the depth here very well. . . excellent. . .  ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
The kindness of your heart shines through in this wonderful poem. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
you have a way with words my friend. this is powerful RP |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
This is wonderful. Bratissimo! ^_^ LadySofia "The smallest feline is a masterpiece." Leonardo Da Vinci [This message has been edited by LadySofia (edited 12-04-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I don't know if I'm reading this right but it really made me think of something I'm going through right now and the one person I can't stand to hear stinging words from is the one I care for the most... but it is very true that all of us need to be forgiven at various times in our lives...let it be...James |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TemptyOne~ A stirring write ... I'm finding I like this bunches~ The neatest thing I've found about forgiving is - I can do it ... and the other person doesn't get to refuse it ... It's a *gift* I give MYSELF~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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