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How Long Did It Take You To Get That Ugly?
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How Long Did It Take You To Get That Ugly? |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
How Long Did It Take You To Get That Ugly? Marge's Challenge : A Gloom Sonnet They were just words mixed with beer and laughter, Only I remembered their sound after, Cruelty mixed with the jukebox’s playing, Contrast with what the music was saying. It took a lifetime shattered in a word. They turned to their beers as I left my drink Wandering off into the night to think, Glad for leaving to be rid of that place, Hoping for rain to wash pain from my face. Only a moment shattered by a word. Drifting to depression walking the night, Down graffiti alleys away from light, In shadows from the window’s reflection, Avoiding the ugliness detection. Gloom |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well that must have been a really bad word, to have so much impact. This is a strong poem, Gloom, much appreciated. Sandra |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Catalinamoon, Sometimes simple words have great impact, You probably have a few of your own; Glad you like how I met Marge’s Challenge. Gloom |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Not what I expected, and everything I expected... A challenge well met, indeed... |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Sunshine, Well, with a line like that to work from; Glad you appreciated it, I figured most would have turned this line A bit differently. Gloom |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Gloom, you are right most would have turned this phrase differently, but you turned it with passion and depth. Write on Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Yanno? I just HAPPENED to be listening to what I think is perfect music accompaniement as I read this (talk to me about spelling when I'm sober) but Janis Joplin? singing "Turtle Blues"? with this? sheer perfection!!!!  |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Kethry, Glad you liked my turn of the phrase, But it’s just like walking Instead of one step after another One word after another Sometimes it’s surprising where you end up, But I always seem to end up at the same place. Thank you, Serenity, Glad you found an accompaniment, I never seem to find a picture or tune to go with My morbid words except in my own mind, (usually the tune is Bach) Gloom |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Challenge well met! One word can cut deeper than the sharpest knife. I enjoyed this very much sir. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Poet De Vine, I am glad you liked my words One word can be deadly. Gloom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Prof, Perfect gloom. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
This is really good Gloom! Such biting feelings and hurt. Even if from a word..people can be so cruel and nasty. Your walk was dark and descendant of quiet ache. Very well portrayed. Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
WOW, this is good, and deep, and beautiful Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ProfessorGloom~ What a wonderful curve of inspire~ You met and exceeded anything I would have expected from that line~ Now ... e-mail the URL to my mailbox !  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Very inspired was this poem. Words can have an affect that lasts a lifetime...how I wish we would only use words that are filled with uplifting another instead of destroying their personal worth. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Words, as you've so well written, can be life or death - me, well, I've always been so ugly so they don't bother me anymore (I've come to terms with it) but in the 5th grade...I wanted to disappear. jwesley |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow Professor! This is excellent and a challenge well met! I truly enjoyed where you took this one...most would have gone a different route. THIS is what makes you such a profound writer! Enjoyed, hugs, Nancy. "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Seymour, Thank you, rwood Glad you liked it, Such are most of my walks. Thank you, Tita, I am pleased you liked it Thank you, Marge I have no desire for prizes, Just that you enjoyed it is prize and reward enough, Thank you, Startime, Yes that would be nice if people did only use happy And kind words to others, But there is a thing called freedom of speech And honesty, as brutal as they might become. Thank you, Jwesley, I believe you might understand, We do adapt, outwardly, despite the inner pain. Thank you, Enchantress Glad you enjoyed this different route, I am often on the road least taken. Gloom |
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Doug Pretorius Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 81Ontario, Canada |
The title really grabbed my attention and it led to a poem I must say I wasn't expecting. At first I thought it would be some joke, but found in the words a pain deeply felt. I really enjoyed the imagery of the rain washing away and hiding in the darkness. Doug |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You certainly live up to your name...both in the gloom of this poem and the professionalism in creating it. Hats off you you, professor  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Prof Gloom--You did this so well..with the sensitivity of knowing how words can hurt...you painted a very real pic...and did it all with great style. Enjoyed! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Can I say beautifully ugly and not offend? Well written Professor. What's in a word? Try reading "N" by Randall Kennedy. |
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