When Sunlight Falls in the Yester Daze...Marge Challenge

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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2001-12-01 05:39 AM

When Sunlight Falls in the Yester Daze

As fog settles in, late this day,
I gaze at moon, this evening's rise.
Wonder "to whom it may concern"
these piercing thoughts, transparent lies.

When sunlight falls in the yester daze,
(unspoken walks of loneliness),
when voices fill the web of mind
to take me back to your caress,
I am a stranger to this world today,
feeling often, out of place.
Naked, penning tears to fill
reflections of an aging face.

Take me back to yesterday,
when loving was a simple act,
Two to share each other's cause
in harmony, not just abstract.
When truth was truth without the gray,
and world was rainbowed in vintaged hues.
I feel a stranger in this world today,
constrained by lines that I infuse
upon a wall of endless stone,
etched with memories, that leave me cold.
Take me back to yesterday,
those memories, in treasured hold.

Tonight released, unending thoughts,
wavering softly in candle's cast.
The eye of faith, bit blinded now,
my heart in mourning, for times of past.

Todays' illusions float the mind,
words seem tarnished in their play.
Between the lines, desires fade
as lost in feel, love slips away.
When message, languaged plain to see
of love for one, in silent ache,
is shuffled off as shade of green,
this world today, I cannot take.

I miss the fall of yesterday,
the strolls that walked me hand in hand,
delivering me unto desires.
If only you could understand...

As fog settles in, late this day,
I gaze at moon, this evening's rise.
When sunlight falls in the yester daze,
I wish to share these loving eyes.

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 12-01-2001).]

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

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of Depression

1 posted 2001-12-01 07:37 AM

Challenge well met,
Inspires me to try my hand at it.

Gloom

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

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The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2001-12-01 07:41 AM

Wow Maureen, you have put this together well, and I would agree that going back to when times were better is so tempting.
Good write.
Sandra

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

3 posted 2001-12-01 08:25 AM

PG

I don't think I inspire well at all...at least not by what you wrote...thanks for the read though

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

4 posted 2001-12-01 08:28 AM

thank you Sandra, I think I liked my yesterdays much better than I am liking today or the tomorrows that will come...It's great when you can close some doors and realization takes hold..maybe then and only then one can find their worth....to themselves.

*that moonchild in me is forcing it's way
onto the blues today

Kethry
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5 posted 2001-12-01 09:41 AM

Naked Thoughts

Wonderfully written and inspiring concept.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

6 posted 2001-12-01 10:13 AM

thank you Keth, and Happy Birthday *s good to see you

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-12-01 10:41 AM

Wynter~
Well .....
I think you've done a wonderful job with a little 'inspire'~

Your thoughts careen in tinge of blue across the page~

Thank you for allowing a little inspire to walk across your mind~

*Big Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

8 posted 2001-12-01 10:41 AM

Well done Maureen....you met the challenge very well! I love it!
hugs, Nancy.

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

SEA

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with you

9 posted 2001-12-01 11:02 AM

Wow!! and then WOW!!

this is fantastic....I do love the way you write

jwesley
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Spring, Texas

10 posted 2001-12-01 12:46 PM

Wonderfully written - as always.

jwesley

Startime
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Canada

11 posted 2001-12-01 12:59 PM

WOW!!!!This is magnificent. You did an amazing job with the challenge. It is so filled with emotion. I love it.

**hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

12 posted 2001-12-01 02:14 PM

(sigh) Oh Maureen, this is soooooooo beautiful! (smiles) Such bittersweet beauty fills these soft and gorgeous words! (smiles) May your tomorrows be filled with joys and may your sweet yesterdays be cherished forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

13 posted 2001-12-02 06:42 AM

Marge ..thank you for the words that inspire *s

Thank you Nancy.

SE..your responses flatter me, thank you.

jwesley..as always I give you my thanks.

Startime..I am always filled with emotion, often times too much *s

My life at times is bitter sweet, Noah, thank you for the tomorrow wishes

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

14 posted 2001-12-02 12:07 PM

In one way I'm embarrassed about part of what I have to say, but I must say it so you will know the power and precision of your words...I'd forgotten the opening line.

Yet, as I read, I felt so much like I was walking through the clouds, floating through the fog, as if I was not fully me nor fully there...then the opening line of your last stanza mentioned the fog and I thought, WOW! she really gave me a sense of that just by the way she wove her words!! Of course, now you know that I discovered you had mentioned fog at the outset, but I wanted you to know, you likely would not have had to as your poem evoked the fog, its ethereal quality.
Well done!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Midnitesun

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Gaia

15 posted 2001-12-02 04:45 PM

'Two to share each other's cause
in harmony, not just abstract.
When truth was truth without the gray,
and world was rainbowed in vintaged hues'

A good title, Yesters Daze. Was the past real, or was it part of life's overall fog? Something to ponder here. Very well written, Maureen.

nakdthoughts
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Posts 19200
Between the Lines

16 posted 2001-12-02 06:11 PM

VAS...*s thank you for that explanation. I amnot sure why I used the fog in the beginning and end...maybe I was thinking of the past few days and the warmth and fog that penetrated our lives.

Midnitesun..oh the past is very real to me. As are my meanings in each poem...I am not dreaming and I doubt I ever will be a dreamer again. Thank you for reading and your comments.

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

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