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Our Lake, this Night

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EagleScorpion
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Here, Now, Forever


0 posted 11-30-2001 12:05 AM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for EagleScorpion

Many times I've died before
I was able to watch the sunrise today.

Breathing midnight grass.
Beside a shimmering lake.
Here and there we were.

Tossing our pebbles.
Laughter. Smiles. Joy.
Hurling our skipping stones.

The moon did glow in our eyes.
We loved each other.

The night and moon, sat in the sky,
Watched over the gently breathing grass,
The sky was so clear.
And the lake stood still save the ripples of our pebbles and skipping stones.

Long, long after, the universe breathed in again,
Exhaled...
And here we weren't this night.
The night and moon sat in the sky
but couldn't watch over the grass this time,
For the clouds hid the night's face,
Unleashing the cold, cold rain....
The lashing cold breeze blew the night's tears.
Forming ripples of thier own..
Upon this lake of ours.
Where we never came to play.

Inhaled and exhaled the universe again did..
And here by the lake we rest again..
Hurling our skipping stones.

Breathing midnight grass.
Beside a shimmering lake.
Here and there we were.

Tossing our pebbles.
Laughter. Smiles. Joy.
Hurling our skipping stones.

To do it right..
This time around...
We love each other.

The warm, white moonlight surfed the ripples,
in our lake, this night.
an eternal amount of times.

The moon did watch every single advancing, slowly fading ripple in all of thier convievable entireties.

varying shades,
ripples in
in this world,
that had and will have varied and differed with each course we took and will take.

Each pebble of faith we unleashed into the mysterious, shining expanse.

Many times I've died before
I was able to watch the sunrise today.

Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for.

© Copyright 2001 Joseph Alexander Knob - All Rights Reserved
Bill Charles
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1 posted 11-30-2001 12:09 AM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

EagleScorpion - what a most beautiful writing you have here. Very nice...

BC
peaches73533
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2 posted 11-30-2001 12:22 AM       View Profile for peaches73533   Email peaches73533   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for peaches73533

What a wonderful write.This flowed well and I enjoyed it very much.
Peaches
EagleScorpion
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3 posted 11-30-2001 12:23 AM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleScorpion

thanks, bill.
I just hope more people will be able to read it.
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4 posted 11-30-2001 12:45 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

"Breathing midnight grass.
Beside a shimmering lake.
Here and there we were.

Tossing our pebbles.
Laughter. Smiles. Joy.
Hurling our skipping stones.

To do it right..
This time around...
We love each other."


I love the way this made me feel....
excellent writing  
EagleScorpion
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5 posted 12-01-2001 04:20 PM       View Profile for EagleScorpion   Email EagleScorpion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleScorpion

thanks sea.
I was wondering..
do you think this poem could use more emphasis on the story of the kids by the lake?.. and perhaps it should rhyme..
I belive this is merely an infant version of what this poem will one day become. Thank you for enjoying it.
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6 posted 09-04-2002 05:38 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

ES,
Loved this gauze of dream.

Mike
 
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