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Standing firm on not so solid ground
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Standing firm on not so solid ground |
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desert fox New Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 7 |
Topping the mountain she stood firm arms crossed said no not this time. You won't get to me again. But he spoke and the earth shook tremulously, walked toward her and her feet shifted uneasily. He smiled that smile and something simply shimmied out from under her. She went weak in the knees. Panic set in, she fought the inevitable, with every ounce of her being but running does no good, when you can't lift your feet. One arm slipped around her waist, and just before the blindfold was applied, he lifted her face to his and granted her last wish. |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Hi! Welcome to passions : ) I am enjoying this poem, my favorite line was "but running does no good, when you can't lift your feet." I know exactly what you mean! Please check your email for a special greeting! RP |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is VERY interesting...loved the visuals painted by your words...stick around, would love to read more! and? WELCOME. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Love this one. I fall for it everytime. Thanks for sharing and welcome. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This reminded me of an old Carol King tune, "I feel the earth, move, under my feet" Yes, it's hard to run when you've been swept off your feet. Welcome to the blue pages! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 Very interesting first post! I look forward to reading more of your writing. ~NancyLee~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
desert fox--Parts of this sound like a frightening dream..and the end was great. Interesting read. Welcome to Passions. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is very good. I love it. Welcome... I look forward to seeing more from you If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Salut! This is so neat I am so glad you joined us here, and I can't wait to read more of you work. Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
wow!!! i got many levels from this ranging from eerie & haunting & scary to authentic love fulfilled.... the blindfold, the inability to move her arms, the top of the mountain, the last wish..... ummm..... well, if it's about falling in love, i hope she survived it!!!!! geezzzzz i'll look to read more of you... |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
This was great.I felt danger, mustery,and all the way to love. Peaches |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
No matter how far you run ... your last wish will always be there. Excellent piece, welcome!! |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
You should make yourself comfortable here.. it is a wonderful place.. enjoyed your work.. Welcome welcome welcome! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions...an interesting read! Looking forward to seeing more... Karilea |
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desert fox New Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 7 |
thank you all for your kind welcome and your repsonses...I really appreciate it...and aplogize for taking so long to come back and reply, got caught with no internet access...sigh |
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