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Six Minutes After Sunrise
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Six Minutes After Sunrise |
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Streen Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169
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Six Minutes After Sunrise The sun arose for a new dawn And I, I was awakening. A lost beam of Aurora’s breath, Shimmered across my eyes, My irises arose, widened, The morn rang out a purplish tune, A bell-shaped flower in the dewy mist, Refracted the dawnlight’s glow, And I, I was awakening. My sheets curled off my chest, I took step in post-twilight. My anteamoric stiffened core, Loosening as strides grew more. The first minute of dawning passed Whilst in joy of the heather’s aroma Opening my eyes to greater array, The lunar vestibule lowering, Receding into the horizon’s edge. And I, I was awakening. The next three minutes went by, As I hastened to a window where A better view of the sun’s debut be. Slipping on a marble by the stairs, A chair I hit, glancing to the floor, Remnants of yesternight's revel. And when finally arrived I there, The day’s dear dawn radiated Leaves of all colors, flowers of all Perfumes and sights of all wonders. A lover’s smile and wishing eyes. My eyes gazing unto this sight so Amazing, the sun’s warmth-lined rays Comforting, wrapping around my heart. And I, I was awoken. And then, closing my eyes for respite, Else they be blinded by pulchritude, I stood in the warmth for a minute, Not seeing yet feeling the foray, The dawnlight’s magnificent display, Of softly billowing pink clouds, The misty ether drifting downwards, The sun’s sweet smile unto all the world, A heart’s pure token of innocent care. And I, I was awoken. And then, in such a manner, Reached I the sixth minute of the day, Yet my eyes remained closed, Though tried I to open them again. Straining to peak with my eyes, That glory which long I felt, Again to see the beauty of the dawn. I struggled in vain with my might, To clasp, grasp the inspiring sight, Of the flowers glistening under, Under the dawnlight’s glance. The bell-shaped glittering flowers, Under the dawnlight’s glance. And I, I was awoken. For a fool ‘twas I that I did not, Did not comprehend nor understand, That this beauty I had still measured, Resided within not my irises, But dwelt within the awakened area, Of my radiant heart. And the day was but unfurling, Uncoiling in Aurora’s misty light. These first six minutes of the sunrise, Were but a portion of all the beauty, Laying in waiting arms for us. For when I was awakened that day, And I, I was awakened, I awoke with you by my side. -------------------- This poem is about my girlfriend and my six month anniversary. The first six minutes represent the first six months of our relationship. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
how beautiful to feel this way, I'm very happy for you. Kathleen (Kay) |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
This is a very creative way to describe your relationship. May it last for long, longer, longest Welcome to Passions btw Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A nice way to express your caring over a span of time. Welcome to Passions! |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Very romantic and full of love. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
  I'm going to keep this in my favorites folder so that I, I can read it six times over! It is beautiful. Welcome to Passions! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* so incredibly romantic. What a wonderful poem for your 6 month anniversery...I love it. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Streen Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169 |
Thank you all so very much for all of your comments. ^_^ I have really been hoping to improve my craft before I reach college, that way when I enroll into a poetry class, I'll have a bit of a headstart on the rest of 'em.  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Welcome~ another romantic writer, I enjoyed your words, and look forward to more... Greeneyes~ I keep my ideals, because in spite of everything, I still believe that people are really good at heart. Anne Frank 09*12*01 [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-28-2001).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Streen--a beautiful awakening, both internal and external. Amazing how love makes so many things beautiful. Welcome to Passions! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Simply Lovely, welcome to passions. Regards, Olias. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
let the Romance continue. . . you will indeed have a head start on all of them. . . welcome, please feel free to ask questions, and teach as you learn. . . we like that!!  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
Boy I better save some room in my library if this is the kind of writing you turn out. I predict an "A" in your future. Great poem, with a lot of depth to it. It's life's little moments that matter, and you've captured this well. Good job & welcome! Go ahead, push your luck; find out how much love the world can hold |
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