navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #17 » Existence : A Gloom Sonnet
Open Poetry #17
Post A Reply Post New Topic Existence : A Gloom Sonnet Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Professor Gloom
Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-11-28 07:29 AM


A moment here another there or there,
It’s not like it matters or someone cares,
Standing, sitting or just milling around,
Screaming, whispering, or not making sound;

What is the insistence with existence?

A dirty street with a broken side walk,
Rooms of strangers where no one stops to talk,
Grime smudged windows of stores full of empty,
Reflected ugliness for all to see.

What is the insistence with existence?

Time spent here being hardly anywhere,
Not much different than being nowhere,
Continue for just continuing sake,
Pointless being yet no leaving to take.

Gloom


© Copyright 2001 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2001-11-28 08:05 AM


I'd take a moment here or there
a moment with you anywhere
of time or place, existence spent
with you, insistence to circumvent...

oh  just having some word fun...I don't think it has a meaning at all...
M


"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

Professor Gloom
Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
2 posted 2001-11-28 08:47 AM


Thank you, nakdthoughts
Always nice to inspire words of another
It is the best a writer can hope to do,
Even if they are meaningless, or in my case
Emotionless

Gloom

Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2001-11-28 08:23 PM


A sonnet conundrum for sure....well done.  
Startime
Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
Canada
4 posted 2001-11-28 08:33 PM


*sigh* not emotionless at all but from the heart of a man who is very special even if not in his own eyes. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Streen
Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169

5 posted 2001-11-28 08:38 PM


The last stanza really speaks to me. Beautiful work!

-Derek

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #17 » Existence : A Gloom Sonnet

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary