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Knowing--Not Believing
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Knowing--Not Believing |
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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX 
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I fell in love with not only love, but life You held me in your space and smothered all my will to live Loved me too much Is it possible? Yes Rocking me back and forth like a child I held tight and tryed to find a glimmer in me in it all I thought that if I cryed long enough you would hear me screaming for myself I wanted to breath I tryed Tryed to hard to be everything you wanted Everything you wanted me to be As much as you pushed, I never fell down I never looked back As I watched you walk away a strange silence filled my heart Once again, I was restless Love, Ladycat Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Just be yourself, as trite as that sounds, this is a sad piece. Kathleen (Kay) |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I believe freedom brings restlessness. Well done. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very well done! Enjoyed, Nancy. ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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lunatic Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 172 |
Well written letter of love  May we have more? Let thy moon arise. William Blake |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Although it has a sad tone to it, the poem shows great strength and resolve. "As much as you pushed, I never fell down" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I felt like I disappointed a woman I love and I wasn't there for her in a time of need and yet even though I feel personally sad I still feel like those that truly love you will still love you thru your imperfections...James |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
hmm..maybe I'm looking at this the wrong way? I'm thinking to myself...what happens when they love us so much and support us so much..thinking they want us to be our best and more, but we're happy with who we are..but they just don't know it. *sigh* I can't get my thoughts together intelligently tonight. I'm sorry if this makes little sense. I do hope I haven't chopped up the meaning of your poem, Lady. Sure miss you around here!  Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
refreshing to see you and your poetry back home, Lady  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Ladycat - smothering one your love is not the way of a good relationship. Togetherness is, in my humble opinion... BC |
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Ladycat
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
It's not always this bad. Every once and awhile he smothers me and I try tooo hard to be the everything to everybody. We're working on it. Irish Rose-I understand.. Perfectly. Interloper-You know I think that you are right. Everytime that I'm free I get restless. Enchantress&lunatic-Thank you so much. More coming soon. I think that my muse is back. Slowly, but back none the less. Midnitesun&JamesMichael-Strength and release was the tone. I'm glad that you both understood and enjoyed it. Temptress-Ahhh, hun, I'm still around in thought, just not always around. You will be seeing more of me soon. No, you didn't chop the meaning. You hit the nail on the head. Balladeer&BillCharles-Two men that I could sit and read all day long. I'm glad that you came and read my poetry. I feel honored. Thank you both gentlemen!!!! Love you all guys, Ladycat Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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