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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2001-11-26 06:13 PM



Look into my heart, deeply to the whole
reflected in your eyes, mirrors of my soul.
Allow me to share this warmth, this glow
feel this heartbeat so that you might know
the depths of this love that I have for you
it beats with strength, steady and true.

If you look closely, you will see
this fire that burns inside of me.
This kiss, this touch will always be for
you, my love, the one that I adore.
In each moment shared a rhapsody plays
only your love can sweep me away.

Together we shall walk the sands of time
our tale of love....etched in rhyme.



On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 11-26-2001).]

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Startime
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1 posted 2001-11-26 06:48 PM


*sigh* this is so very tender and will with a softness that touches my heart. Absolutely beautiful. You have truly etched your love in rhyme.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

snowpants
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2 posted 2001-11-26 07:08 PM


'If you look closely, you will see
this fire that burns inside of me.
This kiss, this touch will always be for
you, my love, the one that I adore.
In each moment shared a rhapsody plays
only your love can sweep me away.'

Beautiful write, GS...this is truly quite the romantic poem...I really enjoyed it!  Great work!

sp  

And did you know with the rain in your pockets,
you can change the weather...

Suetang
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3 posted 2001-11-26 07:24 PM


Gentle Spirit
What a wonderful tale of love and romance you have presented.  Your words flowed like a beautiful symphony.  Take care.....Sue

Suetang

Irish Rose
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4 posted 2001-11-26 08:02 PM


this is truly beautiful poetry  

Kathleen
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Honeybee
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5 posted 2001-11-26 08:06 PM



I'm sure that you know by now that love poems are my cup of tea    This is so soft and beautiful, well written!    and, I especially enjoyed the last 2 lines

Take care,
Melissa

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Midnitesun
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6 posted 2001-11-26 08:09 PM


"Together we shall walk the sands of time
our tale of love....etched in rhyme."

What an absolutely wonderful line.


Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2001-11-26 08:13 PM


Together we shall walk the sands of time
our tale of love....etched in rhyme.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Beautiful poem....lovely ending.
Enjoyed so much!  ~hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

rwood
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8 posted 2001-11-26 10:16 PM


Oh how lovely the flow of magic and love. The entire poem is really releasing and pure. A very spell casting rhyme ~somy and the last stanza is truly pefection..not an ending! This looks really great on you!! Hugs!

Sincerely,
Regina

It's all in the mind
Except for what's in the heart.
http://www.mygem.net/heartquill

jwesley
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Spring, Texas
9 posted 2001-11-26 10:25 PM


Now if that doesn't strum some heart strings and cause much throbbing in the chest - then whoever it's for just doesn't have any warmth at all.

Loved it my friend.

jwesley

Hmmm...maybe your monicker should be Passionate Spirit vs Gentle Spirit - at least for this write!

jimmy

Kit McCallum
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10 posted 2001-11-26 10:44 PM


Oh my ... this is just lovely Gentle Spirit! Beautiful expression to share with a loved one. You've captured the spirit of love wonderfully in this piece!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

bslicker
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state of mind
11 posted 2001-11-26 10:58 PM


Very very nice

Bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

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In Your Poetic Mind
12 posted 2001-11-26 11:27 PM


a beautiful Rhyme...I hope you find, or have found that etch, be well be safe, peace....  
Greeneyes~


I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-26-2001).]

Eloise
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13 posted 2001-11-27 12:20 PM


Gentle Spirit, this is absolutely beautiful.  Excellent flow.  
Dusty Rhodes
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14 posted 2001-11-27 02:37 AM


This is really a lovely written poem. Thank you for the enjoyment of reading it
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
15 posted 2001-11-27 05:24 AM


You "etch" your words very  well, Donna. *s

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

misguided angel
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16 posted 2001-11-27 05:29 AM


Gentle Spirit, your words are so beautiful and full of love.
Andrea

Summon the courage to step out of your familiar rut and suddenly many of those things which held you back will no longer have the power to do so.

A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale
17 posted 2001-11-27 11:01 AM


simply stunning

ever deep...runs
the wishing well
for fairytale illusions

Gentle Spirit
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18 posted 2001-11-27 05:12 PM


Startime, I am glad that this touched your heart, and I thank you for your kind words.

Snowpants, I am glad that you enjoyed this.  I guess I will always be a romantic at heart.

Suetang, I think that the symphony comes from what I hear.....inside.  Thanks.  

Melissa, I believe we both enjoy that same cup of tea very much.  Thank you.

Midnitesun, I wasn't sure if I was gonna use that line, or if it even made sense....
and then I thought....your a poet at heart....of course it makes sense!!  Thanks much.

Enchantress, so pleased that you enjoyed.  *s*

Reg, love in itself is magical.  Maybe that's my problem.....I still believe in magic....
and love.  Thank somy~     

Jimmy, I HOPE the warmth is there.  He is an inspiration to me.  
As for that other lil name......nope......that ones not the one I use
in adult, though I imagine it would work well too.  *w*

Kit, coming from you dear lady, I indeed take that as
a compliment in high regard!  Thanks so much.

Bernie, I am glad you liked it!!

Lauren, dear friend, I pray that this time that etch has
indeed come full circle, and has indeed listened to his heart....
thanks so much your words mean much to me.  May you
always know that.  

Eloise, I thank you kindly for those kind words.

Dusty, I am but glad that you found enjoyment in
my words.  Thanks!

Wynter, it was a twist on words, I was hoping
it would just come out right.  Thanks to you.  

Andrea, thank you for reading those words.
The beauty comes from the love...*s*

AWC....thank you......it means much!!

Thanks to you all!!  Your support means so much to me.
Peace to all,  
Donna

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
19 posted 2001-11-27 07:10 PM


Etching love in time is almost as good as a back rub!  This was a remarkably enjoyable read and on one of my favorite subjects as well.  I loved the cadence of the piece and your words were chosen beautifully.  
walker
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20 posted 2001-11-27 07:12 PM


Just wonderful!
MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
21 posted 2001-11-27 07:22 PM




Together we shall walk the sands of time
our tale of love....etched in rhyme
--------------

Wonderfully romantic....Lovely

Thank you
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Gentle Spirit
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Posts 13989

22 posted 2001-11-27 08:58 PM


Mark, it is good to see your face around here again.  
Thank you for the kind words.  Back rubs are good,but romance.....ah is even better.  Thank you kind sir, your words mean much to me.  

Walker, so glad you enjoyed!

MEM, thanks for the read, and glad that you enjoyed.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

sigheyes
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the winds of destiny
23 posted 2001-11-28 04:57 PM


A beautiful etching Donna.  I am always drawn to your words and have so little time to read them.  This was simply a lovely writing of heart.
texasrose
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24 posted 2001-11-30 11:02 AM


this is an exquisite write of the heart.  thank you.
OLIAS
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Pearl city Iowa
25 posted 2001-11-30 11:50 AM


Beautiful, lyrical rhyme. a song from the heart, much enjoyed.

Regards,
Olias.

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