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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2001-11-26 02:16 PM


What are you doing out there?
Just nothing.
You’re standing in the cold air,
don’t you know you’ll catch a chill?

It’s something,
maybe the night air will fill
the emptiness I’m feeling,
the nothing.
You should be in bed sleeping,
instead of watching your breath,
in frosting,
you’re likely to catch your death.

That’s something.

Gloom


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RosePetal
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1 posted 2001-11-26 02:19 PM


I enjoyed your poem
That's something!

I used to always stand out in the cold and watch my breath come out all frosty, but after i've done that so many times I now prefer to be in the warm house lol.

Sunshine
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2 posted 2001-11-26 02:19 PM



Something from nothing...yep, this likes me...

Poet deVine
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3 posted 2001-11-26 07:41 PM


The way my life is going the only think I will catch is my death! I enjoyed this very much sir...though here we don't get that cold frostiness so I'll just enjoy it in your words.  
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4 posted 2001-11-26 10:38 PM


I really liked this poem, and sometimes you just have to do that "nothing" to fill the void, and you wrote its transition to something well!

~*~  Carpe' Diem  ~*~

Startime
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5 posted 2001-11-26 10:43 PM


Oh I can't resist saying.....you need to find someone warm and cuddly and curl up with them in your arms. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Krawdad
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6 posted 2001-11-26 11:19 PM


I understand this.  I like it.
Did it one morning at -50F.
That was something.

Professor Gloom
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7 posted 2001-11-27 05:25 AM


Thank you, RosePetal,
Glad you enjoyed,
I have learned to like the cold and the dark
Over the light and warm.

Thank you, Sunshine,
I am pleased you liked it.

Thank you, Poet deVine,
Glad you found pleasure in my words,
You can usually count on frosty words from my pen.

Thank you, Mysteria,
Your words are like you,  kind

Thank you, Startime,
For you kind words, I hope you have better luck than I
In finding your warmth, it’s colder there.

Thank you, Krawdad
Been a long time since I was in such a low temp,
Although some say my mood is there always.
Glad you liked.

Gloom

nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2001-11-27 06:09 AM


sometimes your "doing" is my "undoing"...

~softly smiling

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

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9 posted 2001-11-27 10:16 AM


This one reminds me of myself, PG! Wish I had a nickel for everytime I heard, "have you no sense?" lol...enjoyed.
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