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Fee
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since 2000-08-07

Posts 381
Melbourne, Australia

0 posted 2001-11-26 07:09 AM

If you look can you see
the person that I am?

If you smell can you scence
the fear that I have?

If you hear the words I speak
can you understand?

For I am afraid if you touch
I will shatter in your hands.

Expressions,
are the most important aspects, they create impressions

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-11-26 09:55 AM

oh, the ending just grabs at the heart....
well done, I like this very much

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2001-11-26 10:15 AM

Fee,
If a small word with a large meaning, enjoyed

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2001-11-26 03:55 PM

Fragility. The 'fee' paid for love can be shattering. Thank you for sharing a fragile moment.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-11-26 04:02 PM

Very nice finale! Well done. Write on!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-11-26 04:25 PM

Sometimes, one is just that fragile...

enjoyed, thank you!

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2001-11-26 05:03 PM

enjoyed

Contabo
Member

since 2001-11-21

Posts 159

7 posted 2001-11-26 06:10 PM

I do love this poem

CM

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2001-11-26 07:37 PM

I've had that feeling of being so breakable. Enjoyed the poem.

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

9 posted 2001-11-26 07:44 PM

Hello Fee
Such a powerful piece you have presented here which was so very much enjoyed by this reader. Take care......Sue
P.S. Nice to see another Melburnian here!!

Suetang

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

10 posted 2001-11-26 10:28 PM

Very well expressed, Fee.

jwesley

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

11 posted 2001-11-26 10:39 PM

We can be incredibly delicate at times and most of those times are when we are in love. Very well written. I love the way you said it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

bslicker

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since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

12 posted 2001-11-26 11:10 PM

Very nicely penned.

Bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Fee
Member

since 2000-08-07

Posts 381
Melbourne, Australia

13 posted 2001-11-27 05:54 AM

Thank you all for your replies, I must say that I was supprised to see so many.
I'ts nice to know that others have shared a moment such as this.

{{{{{{{{{ HUGS 4 U ALL }}}}}}}}}}

Fee

Expressions,
are the most important aspects, they create impressions

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

14 posted 2001-11-27 06:34 AM

Thank you for sharing..the first thought coming to me was the word Fragile..but others beat me to it..*s

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

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