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SpitFire
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0 posted 2001-11-25 12:45 PM


Sometimes a side street holds itself in chatter,
the only, lonely way to keep.
We find nickels and whispers around corners,
and the tattler remains in circles, you'll see.
It's me. On my way to concrete calling.
And so, I will summon a sea, into this bleeding.
A salt in sting around the day. - Ha. The only way.
To see a sign of foreign in your veins.

Gas lamps illuminate the rest,
and I witness here, higher than before,
floating above the dictation in a swing of self sacrifice.
Oh today, is on my mind - and a silence kills the cry.

Avenues corrupt instead of feed, you see.
It's the hidden, hushed spaces of the side street that heal.
Or attempt. Not your chaos, on a stick.
Or truth so bold it swallows breath.
For I can no longer see a way,
my path burned free from yesterday -
I fear it's far too fancy for me now.

© Copyright 2001 SpitFire - All Rights Reserved
Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-11-25 01:17 PM


Sweetheart, your poetry is deep....deep....sink your teeth into kind of reading, I love it!!   Many times I will write something, you know, and come back later to it and even I don't understand it so I salvage it, but a piece like this is layered and one just reads over and over again.  It's heart poetry.

Kathleen
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2001-11-25 03:13 PM



You have a very old soul in a person so young...and this can be a good thing.  I do so like reading your work...

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2001-11-25 06:36 PM


Almost too deep for me, Alicia..But not quite. Very intense. Take care of you.
Sandra

OLIAS
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4 posted 2001-11-25 06:50 PM


Ohhh I like this very much, very intense and gritty, you have a great talent. I enjoyed reading this piece. Thank you for sharing.

Regards,
Olias.


peaches73533
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5 posted 2001-11-25 06:54 PM


Very intenese.I enjoyed this.
Peaches

SpitFire
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6 posted 2001-11-26 04:21 PM


~Somehow, these stupid things I write help me to come closer to understanding (and breathe a little), if that makes any sense. - Anyway, I know that I rarely come back to a piece of mine and reply to your replies,...but know that I DO come back, and that I DO appreciate every pinch of thought and word left behind. Super huge thanks to these in particular. *Peace to all.
Dark Angel
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7 posted 2001-12-06 03:40 PM


Ahhh Alicia
I can interpret this in different ways and you know, that's what I love about your poetry, apart from the brilliant imagery and the fantastic metaphors.

Your poetry, like the "sidestreets" holds my mind in chatter.

Exceptional writing as usual m'dear  

Maree  

Sven
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8 posted 2001-12-06 10:11 PM


the avenues and alleys of your mind. . . they show themselves here. . . and we just want to get lost in them. . .

you know that I've always enjoyed your work. . . and still do. . . peace. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
9 posted 2001-12-07 01:04 PM


...I ALWAYS enjoy your "silly things" SF...never a doubt in my mind, and I always wish I could write half the way you do...but in lieu of that, I always look forward to more from you with relish.


jwesley

heather_kitn
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since 2001-12-07
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In The Kokapelli's Song
10 posted 2001-12-07 03:18 PM


It speaks...what more is there to say!

-heather

I do not seek...I find!
           ~Picasso~

mirror man
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11 posted 2001-12-07 03:23 PM


Yes, this is good.  Enjoyed it very much.
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