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Carol Lina
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0 posted 2001-11-21 12:12 PM


Thank you, Otis Redding, for the inspiration        
I hope you all
enjoy it and thank you for your time!



The ships rolled in, rolled away again
on the edge of the dock, I sat.
Kickin' wasted time and
storybook rhyme
tucked my hair up under my hat.
Curled up Dockers and a cotton T
sunlight moving over me
I rocked there to and fro
you know,
to a bit of poetry.

Well, I tasted heaven ummm
that day
every cloud was meant for me
oh yes, every cloud, every shape
spelled joy
a joy
drifting over me.

Sure, why not.  I had arrived!
Safe and sound
on the wings of chance.
A thousand
miles from my home
On the trail of a tide
and romance.

A moonlight blessing
was a comin' soon
reinventing all my dreams
So I had to make room,
more room you see
for
everything in between.

Go on, find your soul,
it's alive
no doubt
give yourself some room to breathe
Shake your tail from off that
dusty road
sit a spell, before you leave.

I've done what I've done the hard way
livin' and fightin' through hell
now my soul is landed here
oh, the stories I could tell!

Someday a man will lift me higher
oh God, I hope it's soon!
come 'round to the other side
of my heart
hold it, stroke it, make me swoon!

Open a door for me,
bring me a rose
or just
carry me for a time
(in muscular arms please        
but for right now…darlin'
sit right next to me
let's hold hands
and forget the rhyme.



Carolina
got the pic from Grant Photography online
btw this is a part of me I never wrote before..wow!

[This message has been edited by Carol Lina (edited 11-21-2001).]

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2001-11-21 12:46 PM


       

This is great, Carolina! And Otis would surely be smiling at both poem and photo.
I love that tune, it is very relaxing, I can hear it right now, "Sittin on the docks of the bay..."
I think I'll be humming this all day. Thanks.

Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 2001-11-21 01:05 PM


This is wonderful writing...

Regards,
Sudhir

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2001-11-21 01:09 PM


but for right now…darlin'
sit right next to me
let's hold hands
and forget the rhyme.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Perfect ending to a wonderful piece of work!
Just lovely!  ~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Daniel J D
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Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia
4 posted 2001-11-21 06:45 PM


Carol,
Beautiful and inspiring. I like your work.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

walker
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5 posted 2001-11-21 07:19 PM


I love it.
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
6 posted 2001-11-21 10:20 PM


Oh yes! You said it girl..beautifully, and stylishly.
Sandra

[This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 11-21-2001).]

Magnus
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7 posted 2001-11-21 10:24 PM


simply said in one word or less....

AWESOME....enjoyed this write...

You write beautifully...don't let anyone
tell you otherwise...

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
8 posted 2001-11-21 10:34 PM


well done!!

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Carol Lina
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since 2001-11-18
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9 posted 2001-11-22 04:55 PM


thanks muchly!
Dennis
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since 2001-02-19
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Indiana
10 posted 2001-11-22 09:03 PM


Otis would be proud  

Dennis

~lewisone~
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11 posted 2001-11-23 10:17 PM


As a great fan of Oatis's and a great fan of finely written poetry, I had to reply...
This is great....Who knows, place a little music to it, and you may find it would make a #1 also..... ~lewisone~

Carol Lina
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12 posted 2001-11-25 09:57 AM


Thank you all and Lewisone, yes, it's one of my favorite songs!

Carolina

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