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Lonely Shadow
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since 2000-03-14
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Virginia

0 posted 2001-11-20 11:18 PM


Darkness reigns
Over a once loving man
His heart once destined for greatness
Now lying in utter ruin
Sinking deeper into the abyss
Praying silent prayers
That this nightmare will end
Friends and family
Sending their love
Trying so desperately
To bring this lowly creature home
where love and happiness flourish
But alas, no victory for love
The gaping hole deep in his heart
Unable to catch the gifts
His soul, torn asunder
Cannot house the love and hope
His loved ones try to give
They now can only watch
As the demons pass overhead
Circling, like vultures
Whispering such dark words
Into my mind, sanity crumbling
Falling to my knees
As these dark creatures
Draw back for the final blow
I look to loved ones
And whisper, "it is better this way"
Then, I close my eyes
as tears roll down my cheek
The dark demons reach in
Plunging my heart into the depths of hell
Screaming in pain and sorrow
I suffer this endless torment
Without warning, I fall
Darkness washing over me
Becoming one with nothingness
The shadow is dead
It is better this way

Fear destroys the mind, depression destroys the soul... only love and compassion may save you from death.

© Copyright 2001 Lonely Shadow - All Rights Reserved
Tracey
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since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding
1 posted 2001-11-20 11:29 PM


This is dark indeed. Written from the depths of pain and despair. When I’ve felt this way, I try to remind myself that tomorrow is another day, another chance to change the landscape, find happiness again. If this is written from your heart, I hope you will find a brighter tomorrow.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2001-11-21 01:03 AM


Oh, such a sad one. I have a magic flashlight, that helps me shine my way out of darkness. Would you like to borrow it for a while? For every moment of darkness, there can be a moment of light.  So keep your eyes open, for that light is about ready to start shining your way again. And in your darkest nights, when there is no light you can see, turn on that magic flashlight, and think of me. I'll be that northern light shining in sky, waving hello.
Sven
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3 posted 2001-11-22 02:11 PM


only for now. . .

well done, there's a powerful sadness here, one that seems to be all-encompassing. . . but, as poets, and as people, we learn that the darkness teaches. . . and that we take those lessons back with us into the light. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

ctowen
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since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT
4 posted 2001-11-22 04:20 PM


Perhaps your eyes are not accustomed
to the shadows we cast beside you ...
some a little less noticeable,
others more so at times,
but they are there.

To find a spark of light,
feel its warmth ...
reach for it ...
concentrate on that
and allow it
to grow around you.
It will take hold of you ...

... it's better this way.

Words well shared, thank you.



nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
5 posted 2001-11-22 04:51 PM


I feel this way today  were you shadowing me?
Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
6 posted 2001-11-23 01:09 AM


Lonely Shadow - very sad writing, but very well written. Sometimes it is better this way...

BC

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