navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #17 » Camelot
Open Poetry #17
Post A Reply Post New Topic Camelot Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Carol Lina
Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 94
USA

0 posted 2001-11-20 09:25 AM


I let go of bitter memories, the times I tried so hard to please
I know I'm better off this way.
When a woman is reminded of the feelings that have blinded
She cannot face another day.

As the sun breaks through a rhapsody, I hear another melody
the strings untie my heart within.
A moving theme from Camelot, an underscore of love I sought
reminds me it was real back then.

I begin to start developing, a love I'll be enveloping
in time I know a heart can mend.
Kick the covers; open up a door, it's time my soul and spirit soared.
But one thing I can't comprehend.

When did my naivety become a liability?
I never learned to play the part.
A foolish girl once wrapped around, a dream, a thought, a tender sound
still learning what's inside her heart.

There's a special kind of listening, an inner voice, a christening
I'll make a wish for what I need.
If the world has given up on me, well, I guess that kind of sets me free
did I say free?  Yes, free. indeed.


Carolina

© Copyright 2001 Carol Lina - All Rights Reserved
catalinamoon
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
1 posted 2001-11-20 09:29 AM


Carolina, this is wonderful, I love it. We do have a lot in common.
Sandra

Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
2 posted 2001-11-20 09:38 AM


Carolina,

you have such a fresh unique style of writing that is very appealing...this poem
had a lot of well written emotion...i
could feel your words coming off the
page. quite impressive!! take care.
amy  

"Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't
mean they don't love you with all they have"

Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
3 posted 2001-11-20 10:51 AM


CarolLinaLuna~
Such lovely ink from your pen~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
     noles1@totcon.com                

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
4 posted 2001-11-20 11:03 AM


This is excellent writing, Carolina...

Lovely,
Regards to you,
Sudhir

ctowen
Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT
5 posted 2001-11-20 11:07 AM


Even in Camelot there was moments of betrayal
but love was for a lifetime.

I, too, enjoy your words.
Most excellent!!

Jamie
Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
6 posted 2001-11-20 09:31 PM


another winner  
.
.
.
ps..as if you didn't know--

One legend has the nickname being applied to the state's residents as long ago as the Revolutionary War. According to this story, the troops of British General Cornwallis were fording what is now known as the Tar River between Rocky Mount and Battleboro when they discovered that tar had been dumped into the stream to impede their crossing. When they finally got across the river they found their feet completely black with tar. Their observation that anyone who waded North Carolina rivers would acquire tar heels led to the nickname first being used.

Others say the nickname was acquired during the War Between the States. During one of that war's fiercest battles a column supporting North Carolina troops was driven from the field. After the battle, the North Carolinians who had successfully fought it out alone, happened to meet the regiment which had fled to safety and were greeted with the question, "Any more tar down in the Old North State, boys?"

"No, not a bit," shot back one of the North Carolina soldiers. "Old Jeff's bought it all up," he went on, referring to Jefferson Davis, President of the Confederacy.

"Is that so? What's he going to do with it?"

"He's going to put it on you'ns heels to make you stick better in the next fight."

Upon hearing of the incident, Robert E. Lee smiled and said to a fellow officer, "God bless the Tar Heel boys."

A letter found in 1991 by State Archivist David Olson lends credence to another more direct theory. A letter from Maj. Joseph Engelhard describes a fight involving men from North Carolina in which Lee was heard to have said, "There they stand as if they have tar on their heels."

The letter, dated August 24, 1864, told the tale of a battle on the outskirts of Petersburg, Va. Engelhard was elected secretary of state for North Carolina in 1876.


hope that helps----heh

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Sven
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
7 posted 2001-11-20 09:33 PM


well done. . . Camelot being one of my favorite subjects. . .



--------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Startime
Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918
Canada
8 posted 2001-11-20 09:35 PM


Absolutely wonderful writing that I can totally connect with. My being naive has gotten me into more trouble. It sure scared me into keep the door shut.   A poem truly worth the read. I love it.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Tracey
Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding
9 posted 2001-11-21 06:58 AM


Beautiful piece of writing, I can relate to many of the thoughts here. I must have missed your debut here, as I was away for a week, so I will now say a big welcome to passions and I look forward to more of your writings

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
10 posted 2001-11-21 08:55 AM


A moving theme from Camelot, an underscore of love I sought
reminds me it was real back then.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
"Let it never be forgot
That once there was a spot
For one brief shining moment
That was known as Camelot!"

Your lines brought the song into my mind which played ever so gently over and over as I read your beautiful poem.

This is a keeper!  Well done!
~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Carol Lina
Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 94
USA
11 posted 2001-11-21 12:16 PM


aoppreciate the feedback, all the info
thanks so much, appreciate being read,
it's been a long time.....thank you again.

Carolina

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
12 posted 2001-11-21 02:19 PM


Always nice when we find our freedom...James
Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

13 posted 2001-11-21 02:31 PM


The days of camelot were mythical and magical.  May all of your days be as such, this is beautiful Caroline.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Magnus
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA
14 posted 2001-11-21 05:16 PM


being from S. Carolina...like the name...
needless to say....and I do so much like
your style of writing.....superb..

Thank you....

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

15 posted 2001-11-21 08:14 PM


Very beautifully written, Carolina! I especially love the rhyme scheme!
Carol Lina
Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 94
USA
16 posted 2001-11-23 09:19 PM


Thank you, I worked very hard on this one!

Carolina

rwood
Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793
Tennessee
17 posted 2001-11-25 08:05 AM


Naivity is priceless when approaching love with newfound spirit. So sad when others take advantage of that. They will never know Camelot. You have created your own in this. Stay magical.

Sincerely,
Regina

It's all in the mind
Except for what's in the heart.
http://www.mygem.net/heartquill

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #17 » Camelot

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary