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Carol Lina
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0 posted 2001-11-19 05:03 PM



I was barely holding on
I had written a last will of sorts~
but I held myself tight…
sometime 'round midnight,
my voice choked,
in that moment I believed
I had turned to stone.
My words, my poetry….stone.

Then I remembered Grandma once
said I had Chutzpah,
that resident spirit that can write
you emotions when your mind
has been encrypted.
I know I heard her voice say,
"There's still a wall to go down, girl,
do me proud."

So I hitched a ride
to the north where fog steams
off the moon,
waiting for
smooth November rain.

And smooth as chemise it was!
I raised my face,
opened my mouth and spun my braids.
Ah, yes,
elixir poured
from somewhere over heaven.

Now, I hadn't tasted rain
since childhood
and I couldn't get enough!

My feet so wanted to dance….
I almost gave in to the feeling
but my toes were wiggling
and you know, that's a fine beginning.

Carolina

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Startime
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1 posted 2001-11-19 05:11 PM


BRAVO!!!BRAVO!!!Absolutely wonderful. This poem has life and hope and joy. I love it.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Sunshine
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2 posted 2001-11-19 05:12 PM



Yes indeed, you possess Chutzpah.  I shall have to find mine, and repost it...

wonderful!

It's going to be fun to read you, here in Passions!

OLIAS
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Pearl city Iowa
3 posted 2001-11-19 06:11 PM


A mystical memorable ride greatly enjoyed,
thank you for sharing.

Regards,
Olias.

Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2001-11-19 06:23 PM


nicely done....and I agree it is going to be fun to read your words...


Martie
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5 posted 2001-11-19 07:18 PM


Carolina--Wonderful, wonderful writing, my dear poet.  A possitive influance just glows across time in your words. Thank you for reminding me to be grateful.
Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
6 posted 2001-11-19 07:43 PM


Carolina...
this was a beautiful reflection of
your heart. lovely write, i am looking
forwad to reading more of your work...
take care,
Amy  

"Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't
mean they don't love you with all they have"

Titia Geertman
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7 posted 2001-11-19 07:50 PM


Well you sure did your grandma proud by writing this true beautiful poem

Titia

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Lone Wolf
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8 posted 2001-11-19 08:09 PM


Sounds like a perfect beginning to me.  Great illustration of the renewal of a broken spirit.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

catalinamoon
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9 posted 2001-11-19 08:12 PM


How nice that a special Grandmother could give you strength to go on,and even feel happy.
I think commiserating under the moon is a thing we should do, definitely  
I am really enjoying your poems.
Sandra

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Canada eh.
10 posted 2001-11-19 08:18 PM


Now, I hadn't tasted rain
since childhood
and I couldn't get enough!

My feet so wanted to dance….
I almost gave in to the feeling
but my toes were wiggling
and you know, that's a fine beginning.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
AND...you really do have Chutzpah!!
Love your writing!!
It is a pure joy having you here!
~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Carol Lina
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11 posted 2001-11-20 07:32 AM


Thank you all for reading  

Carolina

Dennis
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Indiana
12 posted 2001-11-20 08:31 PM


yep, it's a fine beginning sure is!

Dennis

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