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OLIAS
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0 posted 2001-11-19 02:47 PM


September  Sonnet

Yesterday I became the enemy,
the ticking clock once friend, now bitter foe,
to stay that hand and stop the imagery,
to staunch that tides relentless ebb and flow.
But finding no divinity in need,
Time he walked remorseless ever onward,
And frame by frame made mockery of me,
In innocence and truth, no just reward,
And cowardice he walked along with time,
an ally from one moment to the last,
no prejudice or reason in his rhyme,
sacrificing all flesh for times repast,

So time redressed the balance,  this he must,
the victors and the vanquished, all are dust.

Olias.



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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2001-11-19 02:54 PM


So much for time, being on our side, eh?

But personally? I don't mind time so much. Each year is like another scratch on the prison wall. (sorry, been a little depressed lately, grin) but good to see you posting again, and what form sonnet might this be? (short term memory loss thing yanno)
I did enjoy. Sonnets are my fave. Deceptively simple, aren't they?  

peaches73533
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2 posted 2001-11-19 03:03 PM


Interesting sonnet.I enjoyed it.
Peaches

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3 posted 2001-11-19 03:05 PM



Olias...where have you been keeping yourself?  Surely you did not have writer's block, but life found other things to busy you, for this is proof itself that your pen still knew where home is...


OLIAS
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4 posted 2001-11-19 04:46 PM


Hi Serenity,
Thanks for the kind reply, sorry I dont know what form this is I have a hard time with these things they never seem to flow like they should.

Peaches,
I'm glad you enjoyed, thank you for taking the time to read.

Lady in White,
Your kind words give me a real welcome back, the bad penny that I am. I dont think it has been a case of writers block more like where there is no sense there is no feeling lol. Thanks for your reply and take care.

Regards to everyone,
Olias.

Carol Lina
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5 posted 2001-11-19 04:51 PM


this is a wonderful sonnet for September, November or any month for that matter. A difficult form sometimes to master, well done!

Carolina

Startime
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6 posted 2001-11-19 06:16 PM


This sonnet is styled as a shakespearean sonnet which I love and is very well done too. It captured me from beginning to end. Very well done and a keeper so it goes into my library.   btw, I love it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

OLIAS
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7 posted 2001-11-19 06:23 PM


Carol lisa,
Thanks for dropping by to read, and for your encouragement, I'm glad you enjoyed, Take care.

Startime,
I'm honoured to be a part of your library and that you enjoyed the read, thank you for your kind reply. Take care.

Regards to you both,
Olias.

Lone Wolf
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8 posted 2001-11-19 08:41 PM


Time stops for no one.  So true, Olias.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

OLIAS
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9 posted 2001-11-20 07:38 AM


Thanks for your reply Lone Wolf, I think that after one particular day in September we all wish we could turn back the clock to happier and safer times.

Regards,
Olias.

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