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Greeneyes
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0 posted 2001-11-18 07:38 PM



Tangled moonlight
Deep sky, softly
Sweeping desire
Of love
Silky eyes laughing
Intricately weaving
Reflection in a
Silver spring
Clouds among
The rivers bend  
Dancing alone and
Free there upon
The midnights end
A blowing breeze of times  
Surrounds the night in
Purple song
Caressing deeper touches
Golden heaven of passion
Softly sweeping
Love
~~


I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01



[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-18-2001).]

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Moon Dust
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1 posted 2001-11-18 07:41 PM


Yes definatly describe that feeling of love and I love it

I breathe the dust, the dust is me.


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2 posted 2001-11-18 07:48 PM


Greeneyes

hi there......... a lovely and awesome words  which moved my whole senses

welldone my dear and keep  up the good work

Startime
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3 posted 2001-11-18 07:55 PM


Moonlight and romance somehow go together to create magic and you have woven a magical poem filled with them. Absolutely beautiful. I love it.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Enchantress
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4 posted 2001-11-18 08:06 PM


BEAUTIFUL!!

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

ctowen
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5 posted 2001-11-18 09:11 PM


A picture painted
better than with
a thousand words!
        

I see the rays of the nights coming moon
tangling with the dying light of day,
as the intruding mist rises from
a searching river bed.
I feel at peace with this
vision ...
breathtaking!!

Thank you for
the wonderous
view!!

Carol Lina
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6 posted 2001-11-18 09:23 PM


ooooohhhh I love the moon..~~~~~~~~~

Carolina

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7 posted 2001-11-18 09:37 PM


definitely not as tangled now. . .

great job Lauren. . . a different view here. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Aimster
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8 posted 2001-11-18 10:54 PM


Lauren,

this was so beautiful...words flowed
perfectly together panting a beautiful
view for your readers, just beautiful!
take care.
amy  

"Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't
mean they don't love you with all they have"

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9 posted 2001-11-18 11:48 PM


I can see that your trips to our workshop have paid off.  Your writing has very much improved.  Excellent, my friend.  This is a keeper.   *hugs*

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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10 posted 2001-11-19 10:03 PM


Your words are intricately woven like the finest of lace, enchanting!

PL

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11 posted 2001-11-20 11:46 AM


Very lovely poem here. I love poems about the moon the stars and Love.

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You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat

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12 posted 2001-11-27 03:17 AM


Peekaboo


Expressive bafflement.  *Grins*

You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb

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13 posted 2001-11-27 05:28 AM


A blowing breeze of times  ... a very  peaceful write, Lauren. Makes one feel contented.

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

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14 posted 2001-11-27 04:18 PM


Thanks to all of you who responded to this, I appreciate the comments and thoughts...


be well be safe



Greeneyes~


I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-27-2001).]

Mark Bohannan
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15 posted 2001-11-27 07:45 PM


The journies of life and love as seen by you is always such a wonderful treasure of time.  I love the way you bring the freshness of your style and vision to us in such wonderful ways.  Beautiful writing and an excellent read.
Bill Charles
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16 posted 2001-11-28 12:29 PM


Greeneyes - I like your words very much. A very romantic writing, my favorite...

BC

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17 posted 2001-11-28 12:32 PM


"A blowing breeze of times  
Surrounds the night in
Purple song"

absolutely gorgeous! I like this part best. just so beautiful  

Greeneyes
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18 posted 2001-11-28 12:37 PM


oh wow you guys, I am so humbled by these responses....thank you....
Greeneyes~


I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-28-2001).]

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19 posted 2002-04-09 02:04 AM


Lauren,

    You ended this so perfectly! So pretty

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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