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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

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0 posted 2001-11-18 02:23 AM

Desire overpowers awe.
Curiousity compromises discretion.

While you leave no footprints
on your sojourn into this dark night,
you are yet observed by the sky.

Never desiring the touch of the
distant star you wanted only
to enjoy it's light.

Yet you were seen by the sky,
heard by the wind.
Promises you thought silent
rose above a whisper.
The reflection of the star
in your eyes was a dialogue.

A star whose distant light you
sought to warm yourself by.
A light which traveled at that speed.
A brilliance whose time you stole.

You need know now the light
though swift was sent
a very long time ago

and it's source
a long dead nova.

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2001-11-18 08:51 AM

Would that we could converse with the stars - Their sagacious saga would impart a winsome wisdom upon us... Interesting introspection here - Done Well - RS...

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-11-18 09:01 AM

First you lead me this way in thought,
then you turn a curve and I feel lost...

well done, Sir!

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

3 posted 2001-11-18 10:57 AM

Thank you ladies. Let's just say one were foolish enough to think they knew someone in this anonymous world in which we write and more foolish to think they Loved here. Assume it ends badly (how could it not?) and that the one more foolish assumes that the other comes here quietly to read the words of the fool. This then would be a final word

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

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Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

4 posted 2001-11-18 12:23 PM

*sigh* a long dead nova.......has it now become a black hole where even startlight cannot penetrate. Such a feeling of loss fills your words today. You write forlorn extremely well. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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5 posted 2001-11-18 12:42 PM

RS..Much impact in this poem.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

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6 posted 2001-11-18 01:04 PM

I dont know which I find more fascinating or impactuous ... your impressive poem of anology, metaphor and imagery...or your reply of explanation.
Both speak poetic volumes and burn intense like a falling star.
Some are blinded by the light...some find their own reflection in it.
more excellence from your pen poet sir.
jm

I would wait till the end of time for you,
Then do it all again ... it's true.
I can't measure my love for you,
There's nothing to compare it to.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2001-11-18 02:20 PM

Let's just say...someone really wasn't the fool, but was lead astray by a woman

who doesn't care whose feelings get hurt in the process as men fall in love with the fantasy of who she makes herself out to be. And let's say for the sake of argument that she isn't even what she appears to be, has no life but the internet and playing virtual games of love, would that not make a female also a "predator"? Well then, this would indeed be an excellent way to say "go away!" Now that would be my way to say it, but your poetry full of those great metaphors is so much nicer.

Great poem Richard.

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

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PoeticLicense
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since 2001-11-18

Posts 30

8 posted 2001-11-18 07:39 PM

I would venture to say He who wrote these words is far from a fool. Something soft and almost fragile in these bittersweet, well written words. (and I believe that would be "Vixen")

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Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2001-11-18 08:04 PM

Richard, so glad you added your own explanation as it made things much clearer. This is very well done. Enjoyed. Nancy.

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

10 posted 2001-11-18 08:21 PM

And being the fool that I am, I come here to read feelings and emotions... penned in by this internet pen, and yet set free, ironically. And are they real? Perhaps in parallel space and time, they are as real as real can be. But what is real? Are the stars reflected in your eyes any less real because the light source is long gone? The brilliance shines through either way.

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

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The Shores of Alone

11 posted 2001-11-19 08:14 AM

Hm, I sense a story I don't know about in here,but that's ok, cause hey, fool that I am, I see my life in every one of these poems, so no problem, I just apply it to me, and how foolish I have been longing for a dead star. But however you look at it,Richard, darn good poem!.
Sandra

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