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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2001-11-13 10:20 PM


Looked into the dark, I saw you.
You seemed to be kind, you seemed to be nice.
You held out your hand, smiling at me.
I was scared, I didn’t know what to do.
You comforted me, you prayed for me.
You held me in your arms, you gave me warm.
I wanted to trust you, but I was afraid.
I wanted to hold your hand, I needed you.
Looked into your eyes, I was afraid no more.
I held your hand, I was afraid to be lost.
You held me tight, you led me to light.
You gave me strength to overcome all.
I ought to thank you, but I don’t know how.
I asked your name, but you just smiled.
You didn’t asked for anything,
You just helped me grow to be a stronger man.
I wanted to see you again, I heard a voice said you’re always with me.
I knew this is true and I felt comfort.
I knew this is true because you said it to me.

Love,
Lizzy Vivian
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~I'm a person of two faces, Who is neither extraordinary nor plain. I'm not the most outspoken

© Copyright 2001 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
Severn
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1 posted 2001-11-16 03:54 PM


Well aries..I think this is great for a beginner... It has heartfelt emotion - which is often the important thing...and also very nice rhythm...

well done..

K

I am a refugee of logic...insisting
on unlikely land with every step.


aries_luv_ppl
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2 posted 2001-11-16 04:13 PM


thank you! I will work hard. I'm not a great fan of books but I'm going to buy some English textbooks. And I've pleasure reading all the poems at Passion!

Lizzy

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

Enchantress
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3 posted 2001-11-16 04:43 PM


Lizzy, the flow here shows your talent.
Keep writing sweet one.
~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Mon Cherie
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4 posted 2001-11-17 01:20 PM


I like what you've written here.  
It is quite scary at first. But when you learn to trust someone, and you know you can lean on him and depend on him, it doesn't seem so scary afterall, does it?

Startime
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5 posted 2001-11-17 01:23 PM


Oh yes, this is really well done. I totally enjoyed it. Keep writing.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

peaches73533
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6 posted 2001-11-17 02:22 PM


I enjoyed this one.
Peaches

rebekah33
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7 posted 2001-12-13 06:01 PM


That first step with opening your heart to someone is the hardest...good luck with all.
-R.

"So stop and love and dance and live and laugh until you cry" Edwin McCain

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8 posted 2001-12-13 06:04 PM




(sigh) Oh Vivian, your beautiful words always shine with love and beauty, this poem touched my heart so deeply! (sigh) May love forever give you comfort and joy your loving heart deserves! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vivian, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

JamesMichael
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9 posted 2001-12-14 02:20 AM


Your poetry has lots of heart...James
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with you
10 posted 2001-12-14 09:45 AM


this is wonderful   I love the way this made me feel  
amusemi
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11 posted 2001-12-15 11:47 PM


Trust...it is the foundation of all we are.  I could feel the timid need in this, the shy art of reaching...Good job!!
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