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Restlessness |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I don’t want to tread along the waterside; I don’t want to bleed from the skies... Everyday directs me to a road of faraway color; Downhill tracks lure me away... Can I drag you with me-- With me to find the bridge that gets us safely across That mile of pompous abyss? I can’t walk anymore; I haven’t the desire to stare at the clouds... You have to be as restless as I am; You’ve got to hold within your mind The impatience of an exploding volcano... Roll with me down to the stream-- There we might just find the sympathetic kind. I’m tired...I’m weary of waiting. Where are the promised words? What could be keeping the guaranteed quiet? Help me not to repeat the issues at hand... Make sure I steer clear of the stresses of everyday living Without you. *sorry, guys...I know I haven't been around much lately, but the 'muse' is, well, perhaps playing cruel jokes on me...  ...And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I don’t want to tread along the waterside; I don’t want to bleed from the skies... Everyday directs me to a road of faraway color; Downhill tracks lure me away... Can I drag you with me-- With me to find the bridge that gets us safely across That mile of pompous abyss? ====================================== Roll with me down to the stream-- There we might just find the sympathetic kind. I’m tired...I’m weary of waiting. Where are the promised words? What could be keeping the guaranteed quiet? Help me not to repeat the issues at hand... Make sure I steer clear of the stresses of everyday living Without you. ====================================== (ummmm ... dont you know aquarians dont repeat themselves)  (hehe)Well I dont get out much but Im thinkin the bridge is not too far from Stauntin very cool phrases and images here ... and the longing and ache rise off the page. Is this where we are supposed to talk about patience and plans? Or walk on our lips? hehehe ACK...nevermind...Im a moth...I got lots of chapstick(blahblah)  and muses? we have muses? WHO KNEW   Good to see your name here me dear  (file file file)hehe me You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. In the sunlight, in the shadows ... No ... I'll never stop looking for you. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 11-16-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey lookie what I found  Groooooovy |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Hmmm, it takes a bit of thought here but well worth the effort.  I enjoyed what I understood to be your meaning. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
J: nope, not far at all...  ...thanks, girlie...I'm thankful for what the long-lost muse has given me this time...hoping for more, but, let's see in a few days, eh?? and thank the Lord...all that filin's done!! woo hoo! thanks fer the way groovy pic, too... ...ttyl from 81!Dee: yeah, I know it's a bit vague, but thanks...I am glad you enjoyed it! sp   And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This one speaks volumes to me sp. Wonderful work and write. I hope your muse comes out of hibernation soon! All writing comes |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I know the feeling well, Kris! Great expression! Beautifully presented! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
(sorry so late on the thanks...I just returned from a wonderful vacation... )LW: thanks so much...I'm glad you could get something out of it! Denise: thanks, my friend...glad you could stop by for a read! sp And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
They say that a little over 134,872,190 little white lines on the road to the new horizon is all it takes to find the peace that is sought and I hope that this last little jaunt did just that sweets. You know I KNOW and of course I concur, but hey, every step is a step closer to the eternal explosion waiting to erupt deep inside us. Beautiful writing and excellent use of metaphors to capture the feelings. You even nailed the cadence and you know I love that. Big hugs and kisses baby. I love you. ps. grab a breeze, pull up a blade of grass, and join me in the tomorrow. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!!Well you muse did just fine with this poem. It is magnificent in every way. Very well done. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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