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Serpentine verse - Eden sweet Eden- class work
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Serpentine verse - Eden sweet Eden- class work |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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I just made this for class Serpentine verse = in each line the first and last word must be the same thought I'd share it with you too Got inspired by something Duncan said in class Eden sweet Eden serpentine verses serpentine garden of Eden, a lovely garden home of Adam and Eve, God's home he created them out of nothing didn't he darkness to light and again to darkness love was all around them, everlasting love strolling thrue the garden, Eve loved strolling appels on the tree, big juicy shining red appels God said NO, no appels, but Eve disobeyed God snake told her to eat one, very intriging this snake sinn it was said God and he explained to her this sinn ashamed they became, why, they were never ashamed lost her right to be there and they became lost apple of Eve became Adam' s appel lump in his throat a big lump home sweet home sweet home sweet Eve Adam Eve Adam Eve Adam parents of parents mistake said the snake biting his own tail by mistake A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/ [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 11-15-2001).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Titia! Enjoyed this tonight. Nancy. ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ What a lovely, lovely form to work with~ I'm afraid I've played hookey from class this semester ... but, I'll be back ... probably with the 'eraser cleaning duty' for a month !! This is truly a unique piece of poetry~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Titia....what a wonderful job! You make it look easy and it certainly is not. Excellent work, dear lady  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh goodie you posted it here too .... I will repeat myself then  teehee  WOW ... WAAAAY COOL...... not only did ya do the line requirement of the repetative word...but ya made it a shape poem as well...... VERY COOL and CLEVER Titia ... YOU get the teachers apple and a star for this well done poetess  You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Wow, Titia, I am impressed here. This could not have been easy!!! Kathleen |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Hi everybody, thanks for your lovely repies. Tell you the truth Kay, Duncan mentioned something about apples and snakes in class and before I knew, the words just floated out of my pen. Even though I'm not religious myself, I know the stories. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lovely story and form!! All writing comes |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Titia, You must love a good challenge. Because this doesn't look easy. It certainly is well done! GrampsSin isn't fair, but God got even, grace isn't fair either. larry c |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Dumb dutchie my #*%!! Titia---This is so impressive. Geez, I haven't even come up with a question for class yet. To write Serpentene verse so coherently is just amazing. |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Wow! I've seen this kind of line structure before, but never knew it's called a serpentine verse. And never seen a poem using such verses in such a fascinating way! Great write!!  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
STANDING OVATION!!!! This is magnificent and the shape is perfect. Very well done. I love it.  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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