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Magnus
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0 posted 2001-11-14 06:18 PM


Calm surrounds me as nearness bathes in light.
Alone,  mind brings a swirling storm's might.
Strongest branches of my tree sway and bend
as lost leaves of thought fall with the wind

Golden flight of memories soar in the breeze
given to the moment that I do swiftly seize
Aching for love's treasured words for two.
Wishing, hoping to simply say...I love you.

Listen to my heart echo within a soul, your own.
Yearn as I do, for when apart we are alone.
Take my every word and bathe in it ever pure.
Golden beams of lover's lives shiningly endure.

Walk with me as you go through life this day
I, kept within you in a dearly special way
Know that this soul remains eternal life long.
For we as one became love's symphony of song.

© Copyright 2001 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-11-14 06:22 PM


The soul is indeed eternal, my friend.  This has a softness to it that I just love!!  

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by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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2 posted 2001-11-14 08:03 PM


I can sense a lot of sentiment in this one, good sir...
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3 posted 2001-11-14 09:59 PM


Listen to my heart echo within a soul, your own.
Yearn as I do, for when apart we are alone.
Take my every word and bathe in it ever pure.
Golden beams of lover's lives shiningly endure.
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this is wonderful writing...
your cadence and rhyme made this a treat to read aloud...
and the sentiments and longing wrap around the reader.
that verse above is so romantic and touching in its devotion and so lovely in its poetic phrasing.
very well done poet sir  

You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
In the sunlight, in the shadows ...
No ... I'll never stop looking for you.

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4 posted 2001-11-14 10:17 PM


Fantastic write Magnus!  Truly enjoyed this piece. The words rolled off my tongue as I read...like a glass of fine wine this one is.
~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

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5 posted 2001-12-09 05:41 PM


I can think of lots of reasons I like this, but cannot really put them into words. You have simply touched me, and that is part of the reason I read poetry..to be touched. Thank you. enjoyed.

I am many.

Sven
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6 posted 2001-12-09 08:21 PM


well done Sir. . .you do have that wonderful flow here that you have in all of your work. . . and, as usual, it speaks right to the heart. . .



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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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7 posted 2001-12-09 10:29 PM


wow wow wow..this is lovely! Your words flow so magically. ((HUGS))
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8 posted 2001-12-09 11:03 PM




Listen to my heart echo within a soul, your own.
Yearn as I do, for when apart we are alone.
Take my every word and bathe in it ever pure.
Golden beams of lover's lives shiningly endure.

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Beautiful and quietly echoing through all of the senses...

You speak of love in such a tender mature way...

thank you
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9 posted 2001-12-09 11:06 PM


Your words always sing with love and romance. Beautiful. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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10 posted 2001-12-10 12:26 PM


This is lovely, Barry.

Kathleen (Kay)
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Laurie Lee

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11 posted 2001-12-10 01:05 AM


"Listen to my heart echo within a soul, your own."
That is an extraordinarily beautiful line.

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12 posted 2001-12-10 07:37 AM


Beautifully written Magnus ... a tender piece, with a lovely cadence and rhyme, very much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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13 posted 2001-12-10 10:52 AM


liked it
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14 posted 2001-12-10 11:56 AM




(sigh) You always conduct the most beautiful symphonies of romance with your words! This poem speaks just like the soft rolling breeze echoing to a lovers ears! (big hugggsssss) You are soooooo romantic, sweet Magnus, your words of love grace these blue pages! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Magnus, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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15 posted 2001-12-10 01:14 PM


Oh my gosh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is so outstanding, I can not justify it with the right words.
Absolutely fantastic. Thunderous applause!!!!!!!!!!I wish I could pick a favorite verse, but...........

ever deep...runs
the wishing well
for fairytale illusions

Victoria
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16 posted 2001-12-10 02:35 PM


Im so glad i decided to look in today..this is simply beautiful..loved it..

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

                                            Pablo Picasso


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