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Magnus
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0 posted 2001-11-13 07:05 PM


When I needed you more than all time
When my heart wept tears of sadness
When your love was no longer there
Where was I?

Was I no longer a part of your heart?
Had I said scornful, hurtful thoughts?
Will I ever be graced again by your eyes.
Eyes which have conquered, melted my soul.

Leaving was not a choice, I am sure
Was merely a reaction, a response.
My heart stopped as you turned, walked out.
The click of the lock deafened my ears.

I see snow covered peaks beyond sight
A chilling wind blowing through me.
A desolate plain of weeds and thorns
A seldom used path calling me forth.

I will journey far beyond this place
as my lost heart seeks you to find.
I will not rest, no sleep will it grace
as you consume my being, my tattered mind.



© Copyright 2001 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-11-13 07:22 PM


Oh my gosh......did you ever write this feeling well. I cried for you. Absolutely magnificent.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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2 posted 2001-11-13 08:03 PM


Great write as usual Magnus!  Enjoyed, and hugs...Nancy.

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

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3 posted 2001-11-13 09:04 PM


  this really got to me!!!!!!!
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4 posted 2001-11-13 09:16 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Magnus, this is so so sad, but I am so happy that these feelings no longer apply to you and you are embraced by such beautiful love! (sigh) Very heartfelt emotions you write so well! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Magnus, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Magnus
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5 posted 2001-11-13 09:41 PM


Kay (Irish)....my family and I are fine...
These are feelings...memories of many years
and tribulations ago...a learning process.

Hope you are OK...

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6 posted 2001-11-13 10:15 PM


Magnus,
You remember those feelings too well. Thanks for the reflection.

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7 posted 2001-11-13 10:30 PM


"My heart stopped as you turned, walked out.
The click of the lock deafened my ears."

That is some audible imagery!  Very well written.  


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8 posted 2001-11-15 06:13 PM


your words moved my heart, heart-wrenched penned.

Excellent done, glad that you are feeling a lot better.

((hugs))
Charisma ~*TMP*~

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9 posted 2001-11-15 08:30 PM


Magnus,
Your heartwrenched pen touched my heart.I'm glad that you have found love in your life and that these are feelings of the past.
Peaches

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10 posted 2001-11-15 09:02 PM


Yes, you understand this pain so well, and through it, I believe you appeciate your present happiness more.
This is done with such clear imagery.
Sandra

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