A Strange Challenge: A Gloom Sonnet

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Open Poetry #16

A Strange Challenge: A Gloom Sonnet

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-11-12 08:03 AM

Enter into the darkness of the soul,
The crimson pools that slowly cools the whole,
Where vitiate victims silently wait,
Despondent dejected demanding their fate.

And whom asks for this darkness to surface?

Collapse into a darkness that’s waiting,
Your spirit feeds the depths never sating,
They’re torn off in little pieces of pain
Which is all that’s filling your dismal brain.

And whom begs for this darkness to surface?

Exit the soft of your comfortable home
And wallow in a dankness all alone,
Careful what you ask for so casually
Or dark fantasy comes reality.

Gloom

I hope this satisfies the lonely stranger’s challenge desire.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2001-11-12 09:06 AM

Exit the soft of your comfortable home
And wallow in a dankness all alone,
Careful what you ask for so casually
Or dark fantasy comes reality.

definitely the truth here

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2001-11-12 09:18 AM

WOW!!!!This is some challenge. Very well done. The ending had me sitting back for dark fantasy is something I try hard to avoid. *grin* I can't even watch horror movies, they give me nightmares. Great work here.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2001-11-12 09:45 AM

Thank you, Nakdthoughts,
Glad you liked this,
There is a fine line between fantasy and reality
Sometimes.

Thank you, Startime,
Pleased you enjoyed this darkness,
Just me picking a form and letting my mind
Wander where it always does.

Gloom

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2001-11-12 11:24 AM

very well done, Professor.
Sandra

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2001-11-12 11:57 AM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Aszard, I know these feelings ever so well, and my heart goes out to you and prays light and faith will again overshadow the darkness of the mind. (sigh) Well done, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Aszard, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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