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RSWells
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0 posted 2001-11-11 04:30 PM



Fossils for eons preceeding seed of man
"Queen of flowers" provided too a thorn,
three thousand years dried writ of Sumerian
before The Son's mock corona was worn,
riparian, in swamp and desert bask
Egyptian tombs have yield wreaths of damask,
in festivals from sacred to profane,
Rosa Sancta (by any other name)
grace cherub hands, harlot's ankles tattoo,
give crimson notice to the hungry swain
so roses brighten but they wither too.

Though chance, all life is seeded in innocence
neutral earth receives in nature's soil,
whether the seed just thorns or blooms flower'd scents
perceives if rain's a bane or Sun's to broil
and if there's peace in dark or Love in light,
or fears the shadow of the Monarch's flight
for perfect in creation is the seed
and righteous is the growth it should accede,
each season's call more beauty it renew
and not be smothered by dark evil's weed
so roses brighten but they wither too.

Despite all the dirt we use to bury it
o'er time the truth's a wind which bares the facts,
given enough seasons we're Iscariot
near death life's bigotries viewed parallax,
though all along our hearts knew what was right
the drawing darkness keens the mind's hindsight
as drowning men's lives they visualize
our shadowed waning days we scrutinize,
at twilight's honest search so much we rue,
in late soliloquy apologize
so roses brighten but they wither too.


The 1st fossil record of a rose is 3.5 million years old.
"Queen of flowers" was coined by Sappho in her "Ode To The Rose" circa 600 B.C.
1st writen record of roses was 3,000 years ago in modern day Iraq (Sumerians)
riparian is that fertile land adjacent to a river or lake.
swain is a suitor and
parallax is the altering of perception by the slightest change in perspective.


"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

[This message has been edited by RSWells (edited 11-12-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-11-11 04:42 PM


Richard,

This had almost a Shakespearian theme to it. I don't really know why, can't put my finger on it but it read like it to me. Could you kind of make those roses last as long as you could  

Kathleen
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also wrote as The Lady of Shallot
"be true to yourself"

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2 posted 2001-11-11 04:55 PM


A bed full of roses requires plenty of manure.
And God knows, there is a ton of it  available everwhere, enough to plant roses 'round the world. Dig deep, double deep. But don't forget to water them well, from the deepest, freshest Wells.

rwood
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3 posted 2001-11-11 05:40 PM


Temporary...but beautiful..made timeless by the adoration and fondness of glance..and by your words.

Sincerely,
Regina

Nan
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4 posted 2001-11-11 07:18 PM


Vast epochs cast as fossiled specks in time,
Striated tombs interred throughout the world
Lend touchstone sediments to advent's kind.
Thenceforth anon wends evolution's change;
As harbinger, the nascency of life,
Foretold of destinies fulfilled today

Temporal world yields pendency to life;
Millenniums' change plenary in kind.
Man's day a flicker in senescent time.


Janet Marie
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5 posted 2001-11-11 08:54 PM


Oh Man....no fair---
NAN said what I was gonna say!!ROFLMAO
what? well she did...REALLY!!    
ok ok...in my dreams I know...
I have to go look up all the big words in both poems LOL........
Once again your cadence and vocabulary impress Richard...as does your poetic wit and wisdom...this all of your work has that edge and depth to it that I have come to enjoy so.


"Though chance, all life is seeded in innocence
neutral earth receives in nature's soil,
whether the seed just thorns or blooms flower'd scents
perceives if rain's a bane or Sun's to broil
and if there's peace in dark or Love in light,
or fears the shadow of the Monarch's flight
for perfect in creation is the seed
and righteous is the growth it should accede,
each season's call more beauty it renew
and not be smothered by dark evil's weed
so roses brighten but they wither too."
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what a very cool verse ....
wonderful language and poetic phrasing as well as employ of imagery ...
excellent writing poet sir...
lovely reply verse from Nan too  
jm


You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
In the sunlight, in the shadows ...
No ... I'll never stop looking for you.

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 2001-11-11 09:02 PM


"for perfect in creation is the seed
and righteous is the growth it should accede,
each season's call more beauty it renew
and not be smothered by dark evil's weed
so roses brighten but they wither too."

Richard, this is absolutely splendid! Beautiful cadence and rhyme ... the flow was simply magical. Very much enjoyed your use of language, just wonderful!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Startime
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7 posted 2001-11-11 09:05 PM


Ah, a walk through history in your words while I opened ancient books to learn of times still buried in the dusts of forgotten people. *sigh* I don't know what to say. This poem is like a discussion, a talk that would go on forever learning and sharing the past today. Magnificent. I loved the walk and will keep this poem, if you do not mind.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Lone Wolf
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8 posted 2001-11-11 09:11 PM


This one makes my imagination run wild!  Thanks for sharing, Richard.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Enchantress
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9 posted 2001-11-11 09:35 PM


Richard, as always after reading one of your writes I am left staring at the screen.  You are the most incredible writer!  
Not to mention the vocabulary!  
Keep my dictionary handy when your name pops up!  
Excellent!  ~Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

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10 posted 2001-11-13 09:11 PM


Well, well, well if this isn't the most beautiful thing next to a rose, I don't know what is.  I enjoyed the comments left by our resident poets as I did this beautiful poem.  There is not much to add to the comments above, except keep them coming Richard, as you are in a class all by yourself.  Your poetry is as intricate, complex and so much like the individual you are, and speaks your heart! (hugs)  

~*~  Carpe' Diem  ~*~

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11 posted 2001-11-14 02:31 PM



Write like this and you shall always have a faithful reader...

a true talent...

well done!

Andrew Scott
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12 posted 2001-11-14 03:02 PM


I think I'll just say "WOW" and leave it at that.  Thanks for sharing what is obviously a lot of thought, hard work and creativity.  I bow to you and yours.  Peace!
Mysteria
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13 posted 2005-12-30 03:05 AM


Missing poetry of this calibre I tell you!  Happy New Year Richard.

Carpe' Diem

Martie
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14 posted 2005-12-30 06:48 PM


Hi Richard...sure wish you would grace us with more poetry!!  
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