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Balladeer
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0 posted 11-11-2001 10:38 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

It has been posted before but, for the new members, it is traditional for me to post this each Veteran's Day......peace to you all.
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The soldier boy was sitting calmly underneath that tree.
As I approached it, I could see him beckoning to me.
The battle had been long and hard and lasted through the night
And scores of figures on the ground lay still by morning's light

"I wonder if you'd help me, sir", he smiled as best he could."
A sip of water on this morn would surely do me good.
We fought all day and fought all night with scarcely any rest -
A sip of water for I have a small pain in my chest."

As I looked at him, I could see the large stain on his shirt
All reddish-brown from his warm blood mixed in with Asian dirt.
"Not much", said he. "I count myself more lucky than the rest.
They're all gone while I just have a small pain in my chest."

"Must be fatigue", he weakIy smiled. "I must be getting old.
I see the sun is shining bright and yet I'm feeling cold.
We climbed the hill, two hundred strong, but as we cleared the crest,
The night exploded and I felt this small pain in my chest."

"I looked around to get some aid - the only things I found
Were big, deep craters in the earth - bodies on the ground.
I kept an firing at them, sir. I tried to do my best,
But finally sat down with this small pain in my chest."

"I'm grateful, sir", he whispered, as I handed my canteen
And smiled a smile that was, I think, the brightest that I've seen.
"Seems silly that a man my size so full of vim and zest,
Could find himself defeated by a small pain in his chest."

"What would my wife be thinking of her man so strong and grown,
If she could see me sitting here, too weak to stand alone?
Could my mother have imagined, as she held me to her breast,
That I'd be sitting HERE one day with this pain in my chest?"

"Can it be getting dark so soon?" He winced up at the sun.
"It's growing dim and I thought that the day had just begun.
I think, before I travel on, I'll get a little rest ..........
And, quietly, the boy died from that small pain in his chest

I don't recall what happened then. I think I must have cried;
I put my arms around him and I pulled him to my side
And, as I held him to me, I could feel our wounds were pressed
The large one in my heart against the small one in his chest.


[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 11-11-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-11-2001 10:40 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Absolutely one of your best. Makes me cry every time I read it sir. Thank you for reposting it.
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2 posted 11-11-2001 10:45 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

"What would my wife be thinking of her man so strong and grown,
If she could see me sitting here, too weak to stand alone?
Could my mother have imagined, as she held me to her breast,
That I'd be sitting HERE one day with this pain in my chest?"

"Can it be getting dark so soon?" He winced up at the sun.
"It's growing dim and I thought that the day had just begun.
I think, before I travel on, I'll get a little rest ..........
And, quietly, the boy died from that small pain in his chest

I don't recall what happened then. I think I must have cried;
I put my arms around him and I pulled him to my side
And, as I held him to me, I could feel our wounds were pressed
The large one in my heart against the small one in his chest.
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Classic Balladeer Poetry...classic cadence if the gift wrap for this poem of CLASS....
We NEED more of YOU around here  
Wanna say it with me? ................
(OHHOWILOVEWHENYOUWRITELIKETHIS)
spammy smooches to you groovy guy!!

You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
In the sunlight, in the shadows ...
No ... I'll never stop looking for you.

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STANDING OVATION!!! Oh Balladeer, this is soooooooo heartbreaking but also so beautiful, for the love of a patriot reaches out to this dearest boy, and the moral and love of patriotism shines in this marvelous tribute. (wipes tears) This one had me weeping all throughout; BRAVO!!! BRAVO!!! (big huggssssssss) God Bless You always and all those who make America shine up to today! (big hugggssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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4 posted 11-11-2001 10:58 AM       View Profile for Startime   Email Startime   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Startime's Home Page   View IP for Startime

All I can say is that the tears are flowing freely from my eyes. This poem is a masterpiece of true emotion. A magnificent tribute to those who have fallen and to those left to take the torch. Thank you, Balladeer, I am so glad you shared this with me today. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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Balladeer,
It's no surprise that a tradition for Vet's Day has so much class. I'm glad I'm a part of it. I am old enough to really appreciate the reality of this poem. Thank you sir!

Sin isn't fair, but God got even, grace isn't fair either.  larry c

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6 posted 11-11-2001 11:38 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Balladeer,

I'm certainly glad you keep up this tradition, it's a wonderful, poignant piece,
so very appropriate for this day.

Corinne
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Balladeer,
  
    I'm at a loss for words at the moment as tears fill my eyes.  The only thing I can say now is wow. I'll stop by later to comment.. but wow.  

Hugs,
Tara
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8 posted 11-11-2001 11:50 AM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Geeeeez...will I ever stop crying this
morning....this one has me really going
right now.....Thanx...it is so beautiful.
and so sadly true....
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Some poets just know how to do it, write...
Kit McCallum
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10 posted 11-11-2001 12:30 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Oh Michael ... this was one of the first poems of yours that I read, and one that set a standard of excellence that I have watched you follow through with so many I have read from that point forward. This is one of the most heartening poems I have ever had the pleasure of reading, and it's not simply the flawless rhyme and cadence that I have come to expect from you, but most significantly ... it is the magical way this story comes to life in the reader's mind and heart. This touches me deeply at a new level, each and every time I read it. Many hugs to you for being the exceptional person that you are.  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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I could tell you that I love this poem, have from the first time I read it.. I could tell you its one of my favorites, but then I say that about all of your poetry. There are to many to decide. So I guess I'll just say I love you Balladeer, and every word you write touches me deeply. Not to belittle the other poets here.. but you Sir.. are one of the main reasons I come back to Passions, again.. and again.

... aside from myself.. giggle  

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12 posted 11-11-2001 12:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I remember the first time I read this...*tears*, the second...*tears*, the third, fourth, fifth, *tears* *tears* *tears*....beautiful touching writing.
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Oh this is so icredible, it could be read 100 times, and still have the same effect. Tears, and a small pain in my chest.
Bless you
Sandra
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Your talent, your tribute...both deserving recognition.  Thank you for reposting this.
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15 posted 11-11-2001 03:20 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Each time I read this beautiful poem it moves me to tears Deer. This is a classic!
and so are you Deer one. Thanks for reposting.

Maree  
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16 posted 11-11-2001 03:55 PM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

A poigant piece from your heart. It tears into the reader just as it should. The battles they fought. The pain that learned it's way into the lives of those that lived. A shared last moment of dignity. I admire you so. Thank you for this tribute to the Veterans.

Sincerely,
Regina

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Except for what's in the heart.
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17 posted 11-11-2001 04:12 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

What Kit said... *G*... and Lucie... and....

All I can add is that I once tried to pick my 5 very favorite Deer poems... this was one. And your continued excellence isn't likely to knock it out of it's place in my heart... Every read is a gift. Thank you.
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18 posted 11-11-2001 04:20 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

This is amazing Balladeer!!  
Everything I wanted to say has already been said
...so I shall simply say,
Thank You for this!
~hugs, Nancy~
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19 posted 11-11-2001 04:34 PM       View Profile for Titia Geertman   Email Titia Geertman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Titia Geertman's Home Page   View IP for Titia Geertman

Beautiful and touching my heart.

Titia

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This is the kind of poetry that stands high on the Remembrance Mountain.
Thank you for sharing this.
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21 posted 11-11-2001 04:44 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

This is one of my favorites, absolutely!

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22 posted 11-11-2001 04:48 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

YOU, my 'deer........ are wonderful!!!!!

thank you for reposting this classic piece and for your beautiful wisdom, tenderness, and compassion.....

i've read this more times than i can count and will read it again many many more....

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23 posted 11-11-2001 05:03 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This poem really lets me understand the pain caused by those called to harms way...James
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Balladeer,

    I have re-read the poem and it brought tears again. This time I was warned however *chuckles*  I'm so glad you repost this.. it is my first time seeing it posted and I'm so glad I got the chance to read it.  You are so amazing and talented. I can't tell you how much I love this poem.

Hugs ,
Tara
 
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