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Honeybee
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0 posted 11-10-2001 11:35 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Honeybee


Composing Love

Expelled from heaven's harmony,
thrown from love's euphony
memories are killing me
on muted chords of misery
~
'Tis refrain
of sorrow's strain
lost in love
of silent pain,
my voice is flat...it breathes off-key
soprano screams are coating me
~
Beethoven of heart, takes a bow -
deaf by an aching soul's plea;
the ebony cream of it's piano
bleeds tears from every key...
it's inner beauty is hollow
in a-minor of misery
~
In the depth of hell, I dwell
blue rhythm is haunting me,
notes swirl not in morning tea
unable to wake from misery,
the music of dreams
are locked away
and lyrics of passion die,
alas, there's nothing to say
smudging the lines in cry,
and, destiny hides from day
for unfinished lullaby
~
Life is a song,
no time to rehearse
and every verse
becomes my curse
longing to immerse my entire worth
to finally feel a love that's real
and give my heart re-birth
~
Yet, I'll embrace
the grace
of second chance
of hope and wishes
of pure romance,
leaping in love
in dance, enchant
on a dove
of Cupid's grant
~
Layers unpeel,
so, I can heal
faith sings again
in tune, surreal
with hand to pen
so, I can heal
to write a love
ever real

By Melissa P. Monette



© Copyright 2001 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
Tracey
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1 posted 11-11-2001 12:24 AM       View Profile for Tracey   Email Tracey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tracey

This is astonishingly beautiful for a painful melody. The way you put words together never ceases to amaze me. This is another outstanding piece by you. I hope that ever real love comes to you soon

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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2 posted 11-11-2001 12:43 AM       View Profile for rosepetals25   Email rosepetals25   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rosepetals25

Melissa,

    OOooooOooo .. this is definately one of my favorites.  You are just SO good.  The presentation is wonderful. You're amazing chickie  

Hugs,
Tara
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3 posted 11-11-2001 08:34 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

Melissa.....Melissa......all I can say is wow and that in real money is priceless poetry, no contest......everything!

Kathleen
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"be true to yourself"

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4 posted 11-11-2001 09:06 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Expelled from heaven's harmony,
thrown from love's euphony
memories are killing me
on muted chords of misery
~
'Tis refrain
of sorrow's strain
lost in love
of silent pain,
my voice is flat...it breathes off-key
soprano screams are coating me
~
Beethoven of heart, takes a bow -
deaf by an aching soul's plea;
the ebony cream of it's piano
bleeds tears from every key...
it's inner beauty is hollow
in a-minor of misery
~
In the depth of hell, I dwell
blue rhythm is haunting me,
notes swirl not in morning tea
unable to wake from misery,
the music of dreams
are locked away
and lyrics of passion die,
alas, there's nothing to say
smudging the lines in cry,
and, destiny hides from day
for unfinished lullaby
~
===============================


my goodness Melis ..this is fantastic writing...
youve penned a symphony of emotions in classic Melissa style...
this just aches and bleeds off the page girlie...you write these emotions with such intensity.
But when looking past the emotions and looking at the poem itself...I have to tell ya ..you worked this theme and metaphor to poetic perfection. All the anologies and references of music, composers, the piano, etc...
the whole theme is carried out wonderfully and one can see the work you put into this.
very very well done Melissa...
you and your clever muse should take a bow for this.  

You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do.
In the sunlight, in the shadows ...
No ... I'll never stop looking for you.

Mistletoe Angel
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5 posted 11-11-2001 10:13 AM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Melissa, this is so sad but so beautiful too! (sad sigh) My heart goes out to yours, but I know deep down true love will come and touch your heart very soon, then the angels will be singing a duet with your heart eternally, then you will be composing the most beautiful love like you already do! (smiles) We all love you, sweet friend, you are sooooooooo romantic! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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6 posted 11-11-2001 11:19 AM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

This is so softly aching, and the end so hopeful. I love it.
Sanda
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7 posted 11-11-2001 03:22 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

again, I bow to the Queen of Romance. . .

you write these with such a deep understanding and feeling. . .

--------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Chelsea~
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8 posted 11-11-2001 09:42 PM       View Profile for Chelsea~   Email Chelsea~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chelsea~

missy,

you express yourself
cleverly here, I really
enjoyed this theme,
and I do love that your
optimism shines through in
the end

your prince will come!
Kit McCallum
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9 posted 11-11-2001 09:47 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Beautifully written Melissa!  The words flow so smoothly ... and such a delicate rhyming scheme, very much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
Startime
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10 posted 11-11-2001 09:55 PM       View Profile for Startime   Email Startime   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Startime's Home Page   View IP for Startime

A painful melody that played beautifully and pulled at my heartstrings as it pulled me deeper into its embrace. Stunning.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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11 posted 11-11-2001 10:13 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

The way your words remain true to the theme of the poem in every way is exhilarating, Melissa. You have written a superb poem here, my girl!  
Isis
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12 posted 11-13-2001 10:15 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

And the echoes of that last haunting note will whisper in the minds and hearts of the reader for days to come....
This although painful was simply beautiful Melissa!!!
Perhaps not only the Queen of Romance but the Queen of Music of the Soul as well!!!!

Isis
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13 posted 01-09-2002 07:47 PM       View Profile for athena4   Email athena4   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for athena4

Melissa,
     This work is so full of beauty and longing, it takes my breath away.  You are an incredible writer, and your words can capture all of my feelings.  You need to publish a book of all your art. I just know it would be best seller.... You have a magic touch with passion and feelings, and I am always taken away with your writing...
              Love, Elise
 
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