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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-11-09 06:49 PM

"Of course I love you."
And he laughed.
"But I like to play with matches, too."

Eureka...

I grew grimly silent.
I stood alone
outside myself
I saw
the flame---
the heat
of me
flickering
coaxing
as a bonfire rages
on a cold winter's night
beckoning
remembering
how many had
stepped up
to warm their hands
and feed the core
with baggaged wood--
long dead from cold...
how they loved the spark
and fed the flame
but always
wisely
safely
back to the spot
the zone of comfort
from the intensity
of the serenity
of fire...

I never knew
that fire had desire
to touch
to grow
be fed
somehow held
contained
to have some purpose
other than a dance
with darkness...

A thought snapped
cracked and sparked
a pine cone thrown
in the midst of me--
(Did I really think
that anyone
would be so bold
as to walk willingly
embracing fire?)

Then I remembered
that many already had...
the ones who had
already
been burnt...

"Whatever are you thinking of?"

"Nothing," I replied.

Yet a chill grew--instant--
in the air
as my light grew dim.

"Tell me," he insisted.

So I smiled at him
and I replied:
"I would rather be a match afire--
light the night
for one instant--
bathe in the warmth and beauty--
letting it consume me--
than to stumble around
forever
passionless and blind."

He looked confused.
So I kissed him.
And I think he understood.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2001-11-09 08:08 PM

serenity...and I think I do too. So much intensity and self exploration in this poem..so very well done!!

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

2 posted 2001-11-09 08:20 PM

serenity-

this is WOW...such a in depth poem
of self exploration...i THINK i
understand this poem...i read it several
times, each time coming away with something
new and a different meaning than the last.
you have such a profound way of expressing
yourself, that includes many layers!

this hit me hard...

"So I smiled at him
and I replied:
"I would rather be a match afire--
light the night
for one instant--
bathe in the warmth and beauty--
letting it consume me--
than to stumble around
forever
passionless and blind."

that is an amazing verse, and leaves
me deep in thought. thank you for this.
take care.
amy

"I could kiss you in
the rain forever.
Turn all of your pain to pleasure
Fill up your days with
sunlight, make the
passion last every night"

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2001-11-09 08:24 PM

Oh my serenity!

So I smiled at him
and I replied:
"I would rather be a match afire--
light the night
for one instant--
bathe in the warmth and beauty--
letting it consume me--
than to stumble around
forever
passionless and blind."

you can count me in on understanding...WOW girl, such a passionate flame you are too.

I Love this!

Maree

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2001-11-09 08:26 PM

"I never knew
that fire had desire
to touch
to grow
be fed
somehow held
contained
to have some purpose
other than a dance
with darkness..."

That one is my favorite..this was amazing all the way around, though.

Sandra

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-11-09 08:43 PM

I saw
the flame---
the heat
of me
flickering
coaxing
as a bonfire rages
on a cold winter's night
beckoning
remembering
how many had
stepped up
to warm their hands
and feed the core
with baggaged wood--
long dead from cold...
how they loved the spark
and fed the flame
but always
wisely
safely
back to the spot
the zone of comfort
from the intensity
of the serenity
of fire...

I never knew
that fire had desire
to touch
to grow
be fed
somehow held
contained
to have some purpose
other than a dance
with darkness...
========================

So I smiled at him
and I replied:
"I would rather be a match afire--
light the night
for one instant--
bathe in the warmth and beauty--
letting it consume me--
than to stumble around
forever
passionless and blind."
===================================

whats this??? free verse from me queen of rhyme...
not just free verse ...
MOTH free verse

and so...you will already know...i love this one.

match to wick ... whisper thy name
the light will reveal ... no shame -- no blame
the moth and the flame ... are really one and the same

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

6 posted 2001-11-09 10:01 PM

A.w.e.s.o.m.e., have I said enough? Go
ahead and burn me too.....this was great...

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-11-09 10:58 PM

This was too cool, serenity!!!! Excellent work!!!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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