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Winds : A Gloom Sonnet

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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 11-09-2001 05:37 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Brisk and rushing capturing the light things,
Leaves and paper swirling to the lee brings,
Piles of debris resting for a moment,
Then they’re flying where ever the winds sent.

Can I not cast a thought to you on wind?

Quick carried off left with an inner chill
To gather and forgotten corner fill,
Rags and rubbish topped with paper and leaves,
There’s something deep inside that softly breathes.

Can you not feel a thought to you on wind?

When whistle winds reduce to just a moan,
Deep inside the discarded pile will groan,
Rain falling almost as cold as a snow,
Warmth of thoughts lost on in cold Autumn blow.

Gloom

© Copyright 2001 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 11-09-2001 07:12 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"When whistle winds reduce to just a moan,
Deep inside the discarded pile will groan,"

Beautiful Professor!  Such a soft and gentle flow to these words, and wonderful imagery. Very much enjoyed this descriptive piece!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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2 posted 11-09-2001 08:22 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Thank you, Kit
Glad you could find a bit of enjoyment
in my Poetry.

Gloom
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3 posted 11-09-2001 03:33 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Now the softness of this was incredible, and I loved these two lines so much..
"Can I not cast a thought to you on wind?
Can you not feel a thought to you on wind?"
You always make this look so easy, but then that is what good poets do, and you Sir, are a good poet!

~*~  Carpe' Diem  ~*~

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(big hugggsssssss) Oh Aszard, this is so so heartwrenching and sad! (sad sigh) I pray this isn't a current feeling you're having, but if it is, remember you are loved by many, and may those thoughts keep you warm and happy all year round! (sigh) My heart is with you, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, dearest Aszard, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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5 posted 11-09-2001 04:35 PM       View Profile for Lady In White   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady In White


Yes, you can...

Yes, I did...

well done!
Professor Gloom
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Thank you, Mysteria,
Glad you Liked this,
In a Gloom Sonnet the repeater lines,
the one you quoted are very important
so I’m glad you picked those two as the ones you liked best.

Thank you, Mistletoe Angel,
Glad you enjoyed, but this is my mood
And almost always so, I appreciate your warm thoughts
And high praise.

Thank you, Lady in White,
Always nice when someone can reap the winds.

Gloom
nakdthoughts
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Can I not cast a thought to you on wind?

...I think this happens more than you know..a nice poem Professor

~Wynter ..sorry, but I am trying to catch up on all the poems I couldn't respond to  lately of yours..my thoughts have gathered and allowed me some freedom...

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

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I've often wondered if thought and warmth could travel subtly with the wind, leaving a tingly, wind chime feeling upon whom the thought fell.  Apparently, I'm not alone.  You write of it well.

Very nice, as are all the sonnets I'm catching up on.  You overwhelm me, Professor.

           miscellanea
 
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