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Tiersdin
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0 posted 2001-11-07 09:36 PM



I was a house
swept clean & abandoned
my heart's memories
& dearest hopes
lay stifled beneath ornate
coverings gathering dust

like the earth,
love had gone into
hibernation
praying for an
early summer...

I was both dead & alive
watching through windows
seeing nothing
my own reflection
so foreign
I could not relate
to the image
nor the eyes

I was a house abandoned
swept clean & waiting
praying for summer
& finally
it has arrived...


~Tier
11/01

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Startime
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1 posted 2001-11-07 09:43 PM


Oh gosh do I ever know this feeling. You have said it so very well. Amazing and very true of how one is left feeling. BRAVO!!!

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Magnus
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2 posted 2001-11-07 09:43 PM


Yes...Summer...time for passion to heat the
fires of our hearts...and to allow love to
return again.

Tiersdin
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3 posted 2001-11-07 09:45 PM


Thank you, Startime, and Magnus for reading and commenting. I greatly appreciate it! *smiles*

~Tier

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4 posted 2001-11-07 09:46 PM




(sigh) Oh my gosh, this poem reminded me of my grandparent's house and the comeliness in the summer! (smiles) I know just how you feel, and a lovely spring cleaning is like the homecoming! (big hugggssssss) I love it! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet R.T, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton



Duncan
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5 posted 2001-11-07 09:46 PM


I was both dead & alive
watching through windows
seeing nothing
my own reflection
so foreign
I could not relate
to the image
nor the eyes

I know this feeling so well.  Also, hoping for an early spring, which it felt like here today.  Was almost tempted to turn all my calenders to April and see just how long I could fool myself.  Great write, Tier.

Tiersdin
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6 posted 2001-11-07 09:50 PM


*hugs* to you, Noah, thank you for your kind words.

Duncan, let me know if that calendar thing works so that I can try it! *chuckles* thank you for taking the time to read & comment...

*smiles*

~Tier

Lone Wolf
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7 posted 2001-11-07 10:08 PM


Wow, wonderful work.  I know exactly how you feel also.  You describe it so well.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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8 posted 2001-11-07 11:29 PM


open the windows my friend. . .

wonderful. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

ctowen
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9 posted 2001-11-08 12:11 PM


I would have to agree with Sven ... when things get that stale, for what ever reason, its time for something fresh.Perhaps planting something near the front door would be uplifting .... and indoor plants like ivy's give an "endless" effect.
The house is only the shell, its what you have inside that makes it home.

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