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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2001-11-06 10:52 PM


My world is spinning
mental confusion rocks and rolls.
A whirlwind in motion
checks I've balanced,
minus you.

Inclined in a decline of emotions spent.
Rotates on an axis of characterization.
Taking responsibility for and against
every movement and it's momentum,
and each magnetic moment,
combining the elements.
  
Small particles derived from within
turning outwards into oblivion.
Taking place in point of view
assumes either of two possibilities
a place of emphasis
that claims no basis of direction
decisions I stand to lose.

Yet my interpretation,
when captured in the right light
passes neither here, nor closer to there.
  
Tossed around, cut in the slack
gaining speed, in retrospect.  
a whirlwind inside of me
spins faraway,
outside of you.


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Mistletoe Angel
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1 posted 2001-11-06 11:01 PM




(big hugggssssss) Our interpretations can be so different all the time, but as long as w elove and follow our hearts, we will find the joys and the blessings that bring us all together! (smiles) You always write so beautifully, sweet friend, I love your talent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton



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2 posted 2001-11-06 11:31 PM


Very interesting imagery here. Left me spinning a bit. Your whirlwind of thoughts are going in many different directions, yet I somehow feel you're in control of where they go ultimately.
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2001-11-06 11:52 PM


Thank you Noah Eaton, you are so kind
and I appreciate you taking the time.


I try my best to stay on track,
but those one way streets can be misleading.  
Do I really sound like I'm
going in all different directions?
Oh that is not good.  This was more about
where I've been and where I don't ever want to go again.  

Thank you for reading Midnitesun.  

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