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Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2001-11-05 03:52 PM

the dancer spins
perched upon the clockwork
          of her life
and moving in time to a melody
          which always seems to be
                    in the background
each phrase passing by in harmonies
          both sweet and discordant
                    sometimes allegro, sometimes adagio
but always moving
          note for note
                    measure for measure
and filling the ears of those
          who hear her song
                    with a beauty shared

spin dancer of life
          spin in pink pirouette
always letting them see the best of you
          when the box is open
let them see your form
          perfect and unchanging
                    strong and silent
forever dancing to that melody
          that is your own
but never letting them see
         how you fold
                   into the darkness
when the box closes
        and the music becomes silent

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2001-11-05 04:02 PM

Sven! I love this as I collect music boxes and know exactly the kind you are speaking of. But, how do we know that when the box is closed the dancer doesn't jump up and practice for her next performance?

Enjoyed...~hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2001-11-05 04:36 PM

Sven, I had one of those ballerina music boxes when I was really little. (LOL at Enchantress' reply, as I can just picture a rehearsal in the dark.) Your poem brought back memories, made me think about the visible VS the hidden side of me. As always, a well written, thoughtful poem.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2001-11-05 04:39 PM

Midnitesun...maybe she has a teeny tiny spotlight? Hummm...Sven, still an excellent write and she can dance in the dark too...I betcha!

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

4 posted 2001-11-05 04:59 PM

forever dancing to that melody
          that is your own
but never letting them see
         how you fold
                   into the darkness
when the box closes
        and the music becomes silent

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You weave your own dance with this...

And you have written such a powerful ending with those lines...

Wonderful Sven...

Thank you
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catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2001-11-05 06:02 PM

John, this made me feel like a dancer myself, a bit stranded in the darkness, but ready to come out when opened. Very nice picture, great write.
Sandra

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-11-05 07:21 PM

I've always wondered what happens when the box closes . . . hmmmm . . . you never know! Nice work, Sven.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-11-05 07:45 PM

Nancy, if she does, then I've never seen it. . . but, perhaps it's another poem. . . thank you. . .

Midnitesun, you have seen it perfectly here. . . we all have that side. . . thank you. . .

Enchanted Melody, thank you my friend. . . the dance goes on, does it not???

Sandra, that's just how I saw it. . . spinning and spinning. . . thank you. . .

LW, it could be anything that happens. . . but, does it change when the box opens again?? thanks. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2001-11-05 07:56 PM

A beautiful write...IWIHWT....

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

9 posted 2001-11-05 08:37 PM

I love it, my daughter got a music box yesterday for her birthday, and I read her the poem eventhough she doesn't fully understand it(she's 7) she loves the spinning dancer poem. It's very touching, don't we all show happiness at times when we are really sad.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2001-11-05 09:32 PM

Sven...beautiful....very much so. Nicely
written.

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

11 posted 2001-11-09 02:00 AM

Sven, this was so beautiful, and the images portrayed just gorgeous.
From a retired (little girl) ballerina a big hearty thank you *hug*

Isis

*The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~

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