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0 posted 2001-11-03 10:56 AM



Autumnal Fog
Virginia Salter

morning fog
blurs this sentient being’s
vision

like smoky vapors
off dying embers
of earth

raling
up a coughin’
spasm
where maybe
none would
have been found

causing
my very soul
to seek answers,
some kind of sense,
in what I feel
or don’t feel,
in what I see
or don’t see

it’s as a pall
has settled
upon my earth
my world

confounding
the present
with the past
and the future

leaving
a limbo
in its wake

©  November  3, 2001

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

© Copyright 2001 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-11-03 11:01 AM


It's amazing how fog can somehow make our thoughts drift in strange directions. You wrote this so well I could almost feel the fog flowing around making me feel unconnected somehow. Well done.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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2 posted 2001-11-03 11:05 AM


The fog makes things seem so abnormal. I liked this one, Virginia!  

God bless America, my home sweet home.

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3 posted 2001-11-03 01:18 PM


Your poem has that misty, foggy feel to it. A good setting for reflective thoughts on the state of the world.
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