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Magnus
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0 posted 2001-11-03 10:01 AM


On a stand beside a large ruffled bed
Two rings of gold given as they wed.
Rings of love, of  faith and of joy
These gold rings  real, not just a toy.

Given to each  from the  heart and soul
with gladness secured  as a new bell tolls.
A vow of love, a pledge of commitment
Two souls became one without resentment.

Who  ever says not a bond this  should  be
Stand now, renounce and pronounce  to me.
For now we have joined husband and  wife
wearing gold rings,  not toys,  all their life.

Through sickness, joy, anger and pain
Their loves  will be tested time and again.
The bond of rings  will smooth  the ground
in front of two whose true love abounds.

May each for whom these bells do ring
have happiness and joy with everything.
Lying together in a warm  marital embrace
as two rings  of eternity  remain in place.


No, the meter is not there...and I didn’t
want it to be.   Just wanted to share a
few words...and feelings....

© Copyright 2001 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-11-03 10:28 AM


Magnus~
I love it when the heart drips our thoughts all over the page~
Beautiful thoughts~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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2 posted 2001-11-03 10:36 AM


actually,  when the meter isn't there..it sometimes makes one stop and reread a line or phrase, giving it even more impact. I enjoyed this loving poem.

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
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3 posted 2001-11-03 10:39 AM


Thanks Marge....I woke up this morning...and
something said write....Something I feel we
who have commitments need to see and not
forget....For anger and selfishness can make
us do just that.  I know....Ihave been down
that rocky path myself.  Tis not a fun thing
to do.

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4 posted 2001-11-03 10:41 AM


Thanx Wynter....you are right on target.
It does cause you to go back,  read it again.
Maybe that is the way this one should be.
Thanx for your remarks.

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5 posted 2001-11-03 12:16 PM


Lovely poem, Magnus, enjoyed reading...

~Tier

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6 posted 2001-11-03 12:33 PM


Great write as usual Magnus.  Enjoyed.  Nancy

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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7 posted 2001-11-03 12:50 PM


Since Love isn't measured in meters anyway, I like the way it reads now, with a natural flow. It is a very beautiful expression of  a loving long-term relationship. At first, it annoyed me that the rings were on a stand, and not on the fingers. Then I remembered a couple whose rings were on a stand because of arthritis and swollen fingers and joints, and it suddenly seemed perfectly natural. Thank you, Magnus.
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8 posted 2001-11-03 12:54 PM


This i a really sweet poem... The exchanging of wedding vows... =))

I remembered my Aussie English teacher once told us that a ring used to be worn only by women, coz it's a symbol that she belongs to a man. It's a man's proclamation that "this woman is mine". Though it's kinda male chauvinistic, but it's still rather sweet

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9 posted 2001-11-03 03:06 PM


Thank you Tier.  Happy I could give you
a pleasant moment with this post.

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10 posted 2001-11-03 03:07 PM


Nancy,   always enjoy your kinds thoughts
and words..

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11 posted 2001-11-03 03:09 PM


Midnitesun....yes, the rings are there because of circulation, etc.  But I
never take mine off.  Only when I am doing
something that I feel is dangerous and
I could lose a finger because of it.  Happy
you enjoyed this.  Lou and I have been
married for 32 years...a few bumps...but
overall very nice.  She is a lovely lady.

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12 posted 2001-11-03 03:12 PM


Mon Cherie...rings are symbols of unity
between two people....though just metal,
they mean a lot to me.  Thank you for
your comments.

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13 posted 2001-11-03 05:15 PM


Given to each  from the  heart and soul
with gladness secured  as a new bell tolls.
A vow of love, a pledge of commitment
Two souls became one without resentment.


Now this is the way it should always be.  This was awesome, Magnus.  Thank you for sharing it.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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14 posted 2001-11-03 11:13 PM


*sigh* yes, two hearts joined by two unbroken rings that declare their love for each other. *sigh* so very romantic. You understand love very well, my friend.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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