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Martie
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0 posted 2001-11-03 12:33 PM


There’s a chill in the air tonight
and it’s taking me past the moon
in the space between the milky way
and the darkness of my room

It holds me there on darkened plane
against a breath so clear
that I can feel the silken touch
of millions of loving years

The place is pealed by laughter
and glittered by lullaby
and it rocks a memories cradle
and it drinks the hurt from sigh

It is filled with music’s silence
and the peace of holding hands
the calm of ocean floating
and the strength of a golden band

There’s a light in the air tonight
and the path it takes is clear
its way is starlit dreaming
that has turned away dark fear

There’s a chill in the air tonight
and it’s taking me past the moon
in the space between the milky way
and the darkness of my room


[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 11-03-2001).]

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Logan
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1 posted 2001-11-03 12:48 PM


Sigh, Martie, your words peal with shouts of wonderment at your talent. Very nicely done, very gentle smile
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2 posted 2001-11-03 01:01 AM


Martie, just oh my, a gentle sigh and for tonight, goodbye.  What a lovely poem to read before leaving here tonight.

I absolutely loved these lines,

"It is filled with music’s silence
and the peace of holding hands
the calm of ocean floating
and the strength of a golden band"

~*~  Carpe' Diem  ~*~

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3 posted 2001-11-03 01:25 AM


Gosh, this is beautiful Martie. And it is just what I needed to read tonight.

'There’s a chill in the air tonight
and it’s taking me past the moon
in the space between the milky way
and the darkness of my room'



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4 posted 2001-11-03 02:14 AM


Martie~
Quite lovely, sweet poetess~
Beautifully flowing cadence~
Love n' *hugs*
~*Marge*~

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5 posted 2001-11-03 07:48 AM



This most recent moon has laid claim to many a fine pen these past few nights....

well done in the capture of the feel...

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6 posted 2001-11-03 08:04 AM



Adrift, in this place your words create...sweet silence.

Willie B

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7 posted 2001-11-03 08:30 AM


beautiful..and hopeful beyond that chill...

warm ((hugs))

Maureen

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It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
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8 posted 2001-11-03 09:14 AM


This is just beautiful. I love it. Thank you for sharing it.
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9 posted 2001-11-03 09:31 AM


Martie,
You are just a delight to read. *L*

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10 posted 2001-11-03 10:09 AM


Oh Martie, Now if I could write like this, I might have stayed and posted more. But, alas my muse has retired and I am enjoying the luxury of simply reading beauty such as this. Whatever you do, don't stop writing. You have an amazing gift to bring a tear to one's eye, or bring a smile to the lips. Sometimes, both at once !! Just wonderful Martie...wonderful. hugs, Chris  

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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11 posted 2001-11-04 03:49 PM


Excellent, Martie! Fabulous!
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12 posted 2001-11-05 11:03 AM


I'm with Chris, right now I have no muse!
but reading is a way of escape I suppose for an hour or two a day. This is wonderful, Martie, just wonderful!

Kathleen
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