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BluesSerenade
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0 posted 2001-11-02 05:02 PM


True creation in human form, reforms,
and often times conforms,
allowing ourselves into the arena,  
viewing live movies on a screen.

Adjusting technical devices,
repetitive dilation darkens the eyes.
Lights flashing brightly,
forcing the color to change.

To some degree the mind comprehends
a universal energy
a conscious decision to believe.

Recognizing imperfection,
a minor detection
a close caption of words.

Cast in a love story, without a co-star
swooning over your favorite character
suddenly you realize
you've seen the end before.

Hot wiring the connection,
brain waves on a monitor~
a freestyle mind state
clouding aspects of perfection.
Snow falls down the screen.

We interrupt this program
to interfere with your perception
Transfixed, by an optical illusion
an experience in technical difficulty.

Please stand by~

© Copyright 2001 BluesSerenade - All Rights Reserved
RosePetal
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1 posted 2001-11-02 05:15 PM


This is so cute

my fav stanza was

"Cast in a love story, without a co-star
swooning over your favorite character
suddenly you realize
you've seen the end before."

This is the first piece from you that I have read, nice to meet you and I will be looking out for more!

Lady In White
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2 posted 2001-11-02 05:29 PM



Brava!

catalinamoon
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3 posted 2001-11-02 06:24 PM


Very good, nice to read this, and I also liked that last stanza lots.
Sandra

doreen peri
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4 posted 2001-11-02 07:52 PM


you are a fine writer...... i will look forward to reading more of your work.... this is an awesome piece.......
BluesSerenade
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5 posted 2001-11-02 11:11 PM


Thanks everybody, sometimes my screen gets a little fuzzy and it's hard to make out what it is, and most of the time it turns out to be exactly what it is.  Hmmm, you can take that any way you want.  (I have to love this 'edit' feature)

I'm on stand by more times than not.

Thanks again.    

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (edited 11-02-2001).]

WRBreezin
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6 posted 2001-11-03 09:16 AM



I love the pace, and "fuzzy" picture you've given us. Just Great!

Willie B

BluesSerenade
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7 posted 2001-11-03 06:01 PM


Nice of you to say so.

Thank you sir Willie B

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