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wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 2001-11-01 08:16 PM



The luminous foil
It covers the sky
I feel that we’re here
Just so we can die

You’re taking me out
You put me back in
Thought you would kill me
You’d kill me again

I’m breathing the steam
Of a thousand dead dreams
I’m breathing the dreams
I’m breathing the dreams

I wasn’t that pleasant
When first you arrived
So what do you think
That might have survived

Now that I’m lifeless
You stir me around
Pick up the pieces
That fell on the ground

From out of the cold
And into the heat
You’re taking my heart
And then you repeat

Our love has a taste
Of bitter rebirth
Why do you save me
What is my worth

I’m breathing the steam
Of a thousand dead dreams
I’m breathing the dreams
I’m breathing the dreams

Now I can see through
The luminous seams
To see that we’re breathing
A thousand dead dreams

© Copyright 2001 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
Tracey
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1 posted 2001-11-01 08:51 PM


Wow, pretty heartfelt write here Walt. It plays along like a sad song. I hope those dreams come to life again soon.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Poet deVine
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2 posted 2001-11-01 08:52 PM


I like this a lot Walt. It's a bit different than your norm but well worth the read.  
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3 posted 2001-11-01 08:59 PM


I enjoyed reading this Walt. This is very good.
wayoutwalt
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4 posted 2001-11-01 09:04 PM


heheh thanky yuh i was inside the theatre waiting for my kid to get out of acting class and yuh the theater is this big octogonal dome and in the inside it is lined with well what looks like alluminum foil and I wondered what it be like to live on a dish in the fridge yuh.
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just out of reach
5 posted 2001-11-01 09:40 PM


Walt - Wow. I really like this one, really nice. Chris  

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Enchantress
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6 posted 2001-11-01 10:36 PM


Cool write Walt...Enjoyed, I did!!  Nancy.

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Honeybee
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7 posted 2001-11-01 10:45 PM



I agree with Poet Devine that this is a different style from you - but, I really like it!

A powerful write, Walt - Wow!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

elisaseyes
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fort worth texas
8 posted 2001-11-04 09:19 AM


Casa Manana eh? Been sitting under the heat lamp too long? I like this Walt.
rwood
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9 posted 2001-11-04 07:27 PM


A thousand dead dreams.....that's so many Walt...but you have millions. A really nice flow from you...Painfull...but very connecting to reality...which ultimately we are...but still dream my friend.

Sincerely,
Regina

It's all in the mind
Except for what's in the heart.
http://www.mygem.net/heartquill

JulieAnn
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10 posted 2001-11-04 07:31 PM


Very good piece here....I like it!!!! sounds like a thrash song.....nice job...J  
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