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alicia_rose9
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0 posted 2001-10-31 11:28 AM


Hi. I'm doreen peri's daughter. I'll be 9 years old next month. I joined the creative writing club at school. I used to have another name here, AliciaRose, but I forgot my password so my mom changed the name for me and I have a new password. I wrote this poem yesterday. Thank you.


"Excuses!"

Today is a new day in my life.
It is not yesterday.
It is not tomorrow.
There are many things
I plan to do today!

They are

Go to playwith my friends
but no-one's there!
Do my hair, but I can't do it!
Go to school but my alarm clock
was not set!
Go on an airplane, but I missed it!
Do my book report
but I lost the assignment!
Take a bath, but my hair
does not fit in the tub!
I'm tired!

© Copyright 2001 alicia_rose9 - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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1 posted 2001-10-31 11:40 AM


LOL. I've heard at least one of those excuses before, but not the one about the hair not fitting into the tub. Very good!
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2 posted 2001-10-31 11:53 AM



Welcome back to Passions! It's good to see a young woman taking the advice of her mother, and learning to write well from the start!  Looking forward to more!

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3 posted 2001-11-01 02:33 PM


You forgot "the dog ate my homework."
                                  

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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Gaia
4 posted 2001-11-01 02:35 PM


LOL. But mom, he really did eat it!!!!

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5 posted 2001-11-01 02:37 PM


This is cute!  Keep up the great work!  Nancy.

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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6 posted 2001-11-01 04:29 PM


I am glad I wasn't looking for excuses when it came time to read this poem that you wrote. I bet you are gonna ace your creative writing club with flying colors. I look forward to reading more from your talented mind.  

PS: I love your name, it is very beautiful.

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7 posted 2001-11-01 04:40 PM


Well now, this is a refreshing type of writing. I really enjoyed this. Welcome back!! Chris  

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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8 posted 2001-11-01 08:43 PM


Well said little lady....very well said...
and I couldn't find my pen because I forgot
where it is...good poem....keep writing.

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9 posted 2001-11-02 01:34 PM


Hi Alicia_Rose,

This is great, and so are the excuses, hope to see more of your work soon and good luck on your school project,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



doreen peri
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10 posted 2001-11-03 08:52 PM


i LOVE you, kiddo!

no excuses, just all my Love to my sweet little girl who's so creative!

you are my  
i'm so glad you know how to use the  
please don't  
you're too coooollllll  
you are my  

oh and by the way, did you finish your
wish list yet?

what?? no??

what's your excuse?


alicia_rose9
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11 posted 2001-11-03 09:04 PM


Thank you everyone for responding and saying how good I was. I don't have Creative Writing Club any more because the teacher of the club is going to illustrate her book. But I will always keep the creative in my heart. Thanks.

cool, man

peace uh-huh

Tracey
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12 posted 2001-11-03 10:45 PM


Yes Alicia, you are a chip off the old block. You have a great writing talent there. This is a very cute poem, sounds like you have some pretty good excuses. Keep up the good writing, and you have a great teacher in your mom.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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13 posted 2001-11-03 10:55 PM


*giggling* hey are these excuses universal or what? My 11 year old daughter uses all of them. *giggling* Very Well done.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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14 posted 2001-11-03 10:56 PM


Hi! Awesome poem, too cute! You DO have a creative writing club, it's right here at PIP!
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