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menage a demideux
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0 posted 2001-10-31 01:09 AM


Rappelez-vous j'ai écrit cette poésie en anglais parce que ne comprenez pas le plus probablement la langue française.....

y para nuestros de habla hispana miembros....

Recuerde escribí este poema en inglés porque no entienda lo más probablemente posible el lenguaje francés.

merci & gracias


There's a surface level
of conversation on the
edges of remembering
what's been said.

Let's move beyond that.
OK?

Let's forget the metaphors
and double entendres
spoken in spanish or french
or some other language we
can't understand, and
remember the words we
really spoke
trying to select
a memory from archives stored
while standing in a gazebo
gazing over
the minor trickle of
the creek feeding into
the river with currents,
so demonstrative
to slam our boat
into the shore --

and then, there
we would be

you and i
and just us

talking about how words
muse the fuse of distance,
not a material memory
on film to make it
real again.

Yes, there's a surface level
on the edges of remembering
when mardi gras comes
only once a year
Remember?

© Copyright 2001 menage a demideux - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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1 posted 2001-10-31 01:59 AM


I would like to experience mardi gras just once...James
Menage #1
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2 posted 2001-10-31 07:03 AM


Je ne recollecte le 'Mardi Gras'... Never been to N'Orleans - I surely do want to go there sometime, though - Maybe we could make that a Passions retreat destination.

Demideux, you've done an exemplary job here - No matter what, we always find ourselves "on the surface of remembering"...

We do indeed, mon amie...

Decaflame
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3 posted 2001-10-31 04:51 PM



...muse the fuse....indeed

Well, this likes me so much, so verymuchindeed....

BTTT with you!

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4 posted 2001-10-31 04:58 PM


I have to echo Menage #1 on this one. She said it all. Well done here!

God bless America, my home sweet home.

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5 posted 2001-10-31 05:50 PM


"talking about how words
muse the fuse of distance,
not a material memory
on film to make it
real again"        
WOW!  This is fantastic!  I am sorry I have no read your work before but I will dig around in the cellar for you now.  I loved this poem and into my library it goes, thank you.

~*~  Carpe' Diem  ~*~

ParisGrl
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6 posted 2001-10-31 06:05 PM


J'aime la poesie.  C'est tres belle.

~Laura~

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