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The Lady of Shallot
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0 posted 2001-10-30 08:07 AM







I’m making love to my muse-
lying face up; parallel
but clandestine-
and proverbial dots tumble
all-around my eyes.
The curtains are drawn but
the Windows are open.
Microsoft air borders my flesh.

The sheets are wet.
Animated movements soon
become an
italicized passage.
We are centered
and aligned.

I’m rapt verse to your gratis sonnet.
Your arms rumple pages,
my lips flood into lines,
our legs wrap the text.

Our margins narrow in-
blank spaces become tinted
peaks…
we quiver in abandon.

I am liquid paper but you,
my muse,
are my indelible ink.

photo: Vintage Hollywood Photography

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

© Copyright 2001 The Lady of Shallot - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2001-10-30 08:12 AM




I am liquid paper but you,
my muse,
are my indelible ink.

loves these line aplenty...

regards,
sudhir

Dark Angel
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2 posted 2001-10-30 08:13 AM


Oooh I really really like this!

my lips flood into lines,
our legs wrap the text.


Phew!

Maree  

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2001-10-30 08:16 AM


I am liquid paper but you,
my muse,
are my indelible ink.
======================

very clever write Lady S...
creative anology and use of metaphor
what poet doesnt love the thought of mixing passion with words...
like rolling naked in the classics  *L*  
very well done Poetess  
jm

This distance has shown how the road remains alone
Now I'm looking in my life ... for a truth that is my own.

catalinamoon
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4 posted 2001-10-30 08:44 AM


WOW, this just makes me want to jump out of the computer chair and clap. Loving every bit of it.
Sandra

The Lady of Shallot
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5 posted 2001-10-30 08:47 AM




Sudhir, thank you kind sir.

Maree, you know the inspiration for this one was
right in front of me all the time I was typing!
Thank you for replying.

Janet Marie, exactly my feelings.  I mean
if you can't have fun while you're writing
why bother?  Thank you for peeking in.

Sandra, well, you just go right on if it
makes you feel good!  That's my main goal
to spread joy and sunshine wherever I go.
Forgive the cliché!  Thank you for replying.

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

Mistletoe Angel
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6 posted 2001-10-30 08:50 AM




(big hugggssssssss) Soooooo delightfully sensual and romantic! (sigh) Every whisper, every spoken word writes a lovers sonnet for a lifetime! I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) You are a true romantic, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet lady, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Robert A
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7 posted 2001-10-30 02:58 PM


OH MY GOD, .........   thank you for this one, ah, yes, thank you
PoetryIsLife
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8 posted 2001-10-30 06:53 PM


Shallot,
Very well done! Fantastic poem. =)I can sense the romatic in you, yes indeed. As I myself am one, I found it quite entertaining to read... I absolutely love how you took poetry, our form of expression - our way of life, and applied it too something so sensual and intimate. It is a very vived picture. *stands up and applauds!*

Keep at it my lovely lass. You're one good write.

Sincerely,
Titus

"Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling

walker
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9 posted 2001-10-30 07:01 PM


I love this one, is so sexy.
Honeybee
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10 posted 2001-10-30 07:03 PM


Wow - I love this - very clever and moving!  As usual, you write so exquistely~

Take care,
Melissa~


"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 10-30-2001).]

Sven
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11 posted 2001-10-30 07:38 PM


superbly done my friend. . . I like the comparisons here. . . excellent. . .

------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

The Lady of Shallot
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12 posted 2001-10-30 07:41 PM


Thank you, I usually address each one personally, but I'm not feeling very well this evening. Thank you for reading my words, if they made you feel good, that's all that is important. God bless you all!

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

Martie
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13 posted 2001-10-30 07:54 PM


Lady--Clever...the thought behind this, unique..add a touch of the sensual ...and walla..wonderful!
Duncan
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14 posted 2001-10-30 08:52 PM


Once again, your choice of artwork is perfect.  Love b/w.
Wouldn't it be incredible to make love on a bed of poetry written by the two of you...on rice paper.

The Lady of Shallot
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15 posted 2001-10-31 08:39 AM


Martie, thank you for replying, I appreciate it!

Duncan, well, yes, yes it would. That is a sensual image. Thank you for replying.

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

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