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Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-10-30 05:48 AM

It is sharp as a razor,
In slicing,
As shocking as a tazor,
Holding you in it’s harsh grasp,
It’s shocking,
A double barrel face blast,
Wiping away what you’d be,
It’s wrecking,
The edge of reality,
The edge of a painful life,
In running,
Like drips from a deep plunged knife,
Yet they are just words you say
In talking,
As you then just walk away.

Leave me on your edge,
So I might glimpse your passing,
Just not left alone.

As dull as a burial,
In the ground,
As lively a funeral,
Shrouded all in basic black,
And no sound,
I won’t cry to bring you back,
Stand at the edge of the street,
Sitting down,
In the gutter are my feet,
Mud splattered by passing car,
Lost not found,
Never near and always far
There on the edge of being,
Deep in town,
Over the edge of fleeing.

Leave me on your edge,
So I might glimpse your passing,
Just not left alone.

Gloom

The Lady of Shallot
Senior Member

since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

1 posted 2001-10-30 06:40 AM

Very strong descriptive language here, Professor, thoroughly enjoyed, felt almost "in" the poem, if you know what I mean!

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-10-30 09:07 AM

It’s shocking,
A double barrel face blast,
Wiping away what you’d be,
It’s wrecking,
The edge of reality,
The edge of a painful life,
In running,
Like drips from a deep plunged knife,
Yet they are just words you say
In talking,
As you then just walk away.

Leave me on your edge,
So I might glimpse your passing,
Just not left alone.
===================================

vivid and impactuous write PG...
your gift for rhyme is dressed well in this ones dark, cryptic and sharp edge.
well done poet sir
jm

This distance has shown how the road remains alone
Now I'm looking in my life ... for a truth that is my own.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

3 posted 2001-10-30 09:39 AM

WOW!!!!!A powerful write that is painfully written. Very well written.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Robert A
Member

since 2001-10-29

Posts 174

4 posted 2001-10-30 03:03 PM

slice and dice huh? ouch!

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

5 posted 2001-10-30 03:36 PM

Yikes!! This one made shiver. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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