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The Moat
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The Moat |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The Moat A moat surrounds our castle wall Protects us from the wherewithal. A fluid wile of subtle style That hosts this verbal stone of pile. Took years of mortar and invent To build this wall of stone cement And many more of sifting sand To bring the intricate to band Within lies treasures of your mind That took you years and years to bind. And now you have a castle high That reaches clear into the sky. You walk the ramparts night and day And watch for ghosts to come your way Your weakest point is from within To change your mind would be a sin. So here you sit behind the moat And dote on useless as you gloat. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 10-29-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's a keeper, this... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What a great metaphor - The importance of anything and everything is relative, isn't it?? This one is awesome, Sy...  |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
The meaning comes through and it is a great metaphor. However, you may want to edit the spelling: mote= small particle moat= deep, wide trench, usu. filled with water, around the ramparts of a castle Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, thank you *L* Nan, Thank you love. Kisses and hugs. VAS, Thank you and I did. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Within lies treasures of your mind That took you years and years to bind. And now you have a castle high That reaches clear into the sky. You walk the ramparts night and day And watch for ghosts to come your way Your weakest point is from within To change your mind would be a sin. So here you sit behind the moat And dote on useless as you gloat. ================================== me thinks Randy had a hand in this  are there any "gators" in this moat? *L* very cool wise guy rhyme me sweet Stinky... we learn from your every verse.  meThis distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Yes Randy is smiling and blows you hot kisses Winkiewinkie. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Awesome indeed, Sy! Fantastic expression! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, Thank you so much Love, Sy |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Hmmmmm... I've known a few castles such as this. Damn hard things to lay siege to. Enjoyed the read and the word usage. Back to the top you go. Peace! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is SO appropriate for me today---I found interesting the mote and moat exchange!Hugs to you sy, for writing my daily message, you are better than a horoscope! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I'm stuck on the wrong side of the moat, Sy. Now what.... Like this lots.. Sandra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I almost fell off the parapet and into the moat once....after too much wine with dinner..but, that's another story. Great write!! ~hugs, Nancy. ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Andrew, we all have thank you for the read. Serenity, Glad you liked. *L* Sandra, Nothing wrong with that. *L* Nancy, LOL be careful. *L* |
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Robert A Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 174 |
yes, in the mind, there lies the real treasure, hell or heaven, depending on the navigator I believe, enjoyed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Robert A, I thank you for the read. |
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