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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2001-10-27 06:36 PM


When

When beauty laid its golden wing
On earth and starry sea above
On every field, on everything
I knew that I had come to love

When time no longer marked my day
When night became eternity
Then all the beauty, earth and sea
became a living part of me

For I had sipped of lover’s wine
And I had known the height of bliss
Sweet tunes were strumed in chords sublime
In swirling rapture of a kiss

When I first felt another life
inside me, soon to walk on earth
That was the moment I first knew
fulfillment, purpose, meaning, worth

When little child eyes were filled
with wonderment so true and pure
They captured all the splendid joys
that in my life had come before

They were the sum of everything
where beauty laid its golden wing
All came to me from heaven above
the moment I first knew of love

Elizabeth Santos

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1 posted 2001-10-27 06:44 PM




BRAVO!!! BEAUTIFUL!!! Love fills your beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth! (smiles) It is such a beautiful feeling when it does happen, for God is what brings each lover together! (smiles) I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) Muah! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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2 posted 2001-10-27 06:47 PM


Elizabeth, this is so moving and beautiful!
I enjoyed this very much!  ~hugs, Nancy~

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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3 posted 2001-10-27 06:55 PM



Certain forms of love are rare
women have many to compare
men are not quite sure of the pull
that babes have when arms are full

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 10-27-2001).]

Startime
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4 posted 2001-10-27 07:30 PM


*sigh* you can sure bring back the memories when. You touch the heart with your words and move me to tears. So very beautiful. Thank you for sharing this poem with me.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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5 posted 2001-10-27 07:42 PM


Elizabeth, this is emotive~~~~~

it's life...love, it's poetry.

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"

"Others can stop you temporarily, but only you can do it permanently."

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6 posted 2001-10-28 03:48 AM


This a "Mother's Creed" Elizabeth, for never is there another feeling like this.  BRAVO!

~*~  Carpe' Diem  ~*~

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7 posted 2001-10-28 03:54 AM


Elizabeth,
I'm thinking you're on a role here. My goodness...don't stop! That was fabulous.

wornways
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8 posted 2001-10-28 05:18 AM


wooooweeee! nice nice NICE write. ahh.. what a refreshing read this was. metre, rhyme, completion of thought, one thought per line, a completion of thoughts per stanza, a full expression through the poem, emotional and understandable. very nicely done. don't stop the pen from penning, your hand is gifted.
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9 posted 2001-10-28 04:26 PM


when?

always my friend. . . always. . .

I continue to marvel at your gift. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 2001-10-29 06:49 AM


Thank you all for your very touching remarks. They are very generous and much appreciated
Liz

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