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a temper's tantrum
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a temper's tantrum |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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You might just as well as cut my chest open with a bent jigsaw-- and spread my ribs like racks of meat never stopping once to pause to wonder that my heart still beats or that my trust of you was breached... You opened wide and thrust foot in a temper tantrum's stomp within-- again, again I felt your boot violence in rage is mute... Tell me I make up the pain. Then tell me why? What is my gain? Tell me you don't own this game. Oh cut me open, once again. *This is in no way to be taken literally-sigh...not an endorsement for violence of any sort-- this is not an indication of domestic abuse, more of a metaphor for the emotional pain caused by ...fill-in-the-blank...sigh* |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hey, it's good emotional venting. Glad you put in the disclaimer, so no one will feel they have to come flying down there to protect you.  That's some vivid imagery! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tell me I make up the pain. Then tell me why? What is my gain? Tell me you don't own this game. Oh cut me open, once again. =============================== Ive said it before... will say it again.............. YOU bleed poetry. heart-hugs me twin mothy me This distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
serenity, ditto Midnitesun. Wow for the clarity of the issue addressed! So I guess this one is rated pg13? |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes! Off with ye boots, ye cowardly rogue! To the gallows with ye! Bleed alive in a shallow grave while the worms pick your flesh! May your peace be the last nail driven in your coffin, just out of your reach! fill in the blank! I love that! ________ this was fun but I'm not mad at anyone, just inspired!!! Kathleen nickname "Kay" "Others can stop you temporarily, but only you can do it permanently." [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 10-27-2001).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes, filling in the blank here.. Sigh..I got the point real well. Sandra |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
It was not hard to fill in the blanks to this vivid poem. It makes it way into long hidden places. Very well said. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Karen, I'm so happy this isn't taken literally, for my heart cried reading this poem of stinging pain! (sigh) I think this is a feeling many of us can relate to! (sigh) Sad but well-written, dearest friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet serenity, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
An excellent use of imagery here. Well done, Karen. Michael Auguste~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Verbal..mental...physical...it's all the same baby..and anyone that says different...well...that's their right I suppose. Intense write S'en that deserves a hug of one that knows...**HUGS** damn shame that either one of us has to "know"...Love ya girlie! |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Sounds pretty painful. I've felt like this before and it feels just like you write it. But hey, me and Sandra are trying to arrange a trip to New Orleans, so you can come out drinkin and dancin with us and we can all have some fun for a while. Ya game???? If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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