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WRBreezin
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since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

0 posted 2001-10-25 06:39 AM

Reddened

I don't reach deep inside
the dark soil
rich as it may be
nurturing life
Though once I sprang
shooting like a star
held bright beneath its grain
Robust with reddened zeal
I lived to stake a claim
but the rains stopped
and the crown of petals
I once prized wilted into my soul
Now I live crushed between the pages
of her heart's journal
lifeless but not forgotten
in harrowing times I still raise her smile

Willie
©2001

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

1 posted 2001-10-25 07:28 AM

Memories are sweet indeed. I sometimes like to go through my old journals. And like the journals of your ladies heart, the memories always raise a smile. Beautiful write Willie. And may you spring like a shooting star again

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

2 posted 2001-10-25 07:35 AM

I lived to stake a claim
but the rains stopped
and the crown of petals
I once prized wilted into my soul
Now I live crushed between the pages
of her heart's journal
lifeless but not forgotten
in harrowing times I still raise her smile

Willie, you have peeked into my heart and the remains of an unforgettable love.
This is very touching, and wonderfully written.

Look into the eyes of a man and
you will find the soul of the woman
who loves him...

A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

3 posted 2001-10-29 07:03 PM

and in a southern breeze
the snow from a desert mountain
lays her kiss upon him
forever keeping him warm.

) be happy dear friend

Look into the eyes of a man and
you will find the soul of the woman
who loves him...

The Lady of Shallot
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since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

4 posted 2001-10-29 07:26 PM

this is a real treat to read, I was pleasantly surprised!

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

[This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-29-2001).]

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2001-10-29 07:29 PM

I felt as thought a flower could speak....
I enjoyed this and I can see it lying there.
Always bringing a smile to a face when the
page is just right.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2001-10-29 09:49 PM

As one who has pressed many wild flowers into books, I felt a strong kinship with this flower of memory. A very good write.

WRBreezin
Member

since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

7 posted 2001-11-02 05:02 AM

Thanks everyone, I'm glad you each found something to enjoy in "Reddened"

Willie B

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2001-11-02 07:40 PM

Oh I love this!! I certainly will read more of your work sir.

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

9 posted 2001-11-02 09:13 PM

I saw a brilliant red rose in this poem that is kept within pages of a book of sweet memories. It gave a feeling of purpose still that the rose has when it is brought out and viewed, though dry now, still the memories make it fresh again. BRAVO!!! I love it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

WRBreezin
Member

since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

10 posted 2001-11-02 10:11 PM

Poet de Vine, Startime

Thanks for taking a look at "Reddened"
I appreciate your remarks.

Willie B

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