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In search of missing love
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In search of missing love |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Soft light shining onto a wooden swing, a lovers rest. Sparks of fire flying upward into a chimney’s heart. Solitary weeping candles wavering against a hidden air’s caress. Visions of two shadows dancing on walls of love. I miss this scene so deeply tucked away in my soul. Wracked mind of a tortured man, siting alone on the swing. I still sense your presence there, I hear the laughter shared. Please do come again, for my journey of love has ceased. The lights shimmering brighter than distant stars in a night sky as soulful sparks of flame climb high in search of you. Tears falling, soaking into worn boards beneath tired feet. A lover’s trek in search of life has not found a treasured love. I write words of passionless nights, of an empty bed, now cold. I eat spoons of bland sadness, they only fill my heart. Your vision wavering before me, fades as each day passes. I strain to see your smile, no longer see your shimmering eyes. Your eyes once shone brightest love, and then became dark, gone. I wake to the emptiness of our wedding bed, my tears fall again. My cries, unheard by others, continue in me, unrelenting. I silently scream pain and woe, I will not, I can not stop. I walk through a clearing shared, no birds flying over. The fields of green now brown, a playground now dead. My feet carry my heavy heart, my arms grasp open air. I sit again in this swing, Oh... I do wish you were there. My head raises, to the sound of a creaking board. A distant Loon calls to a mate, as I breath a sigh. I see the brightest eyes, the shimmer of true love. Tears of relief, of great joy fall freely as love returns. Two shadows become one on a swing, destiny unknown. |
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Wanda Member
since 2001-10-23
Posts 461 |
This poem is absolutely wonderful. Your poetry just keeps getting better all the time. I am so excited for you. This is so sad, but I really like the way you ended the poem with a note of hope. Good job!! Wanda |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Your loving aching heart cries all throughout this lonely poem only then to feel the joy of sweet love returning! (big hugggssssss) BRAVO!!! I LOVE IT!!! It's like the swing represents innocence of the heart and the laughter lovers share together with unconditional love! (sigh) BRAVO!!! I LOVE IT, SWEET FRIEND!!! (big hugggssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Magnus, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* oh yes, the sadness of this poem brought tears to my eyes and yet the hope shines brightly pushing away the clouds of loneliness. A powerful poem that touches deeply the emotions of the heart.  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
I love this one, I think that as long as we are aware of how love changes we can renew it. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wanda, I am pleased to see you here. And I always enjoy your comments about my poetry. Now I can share comments by commenting to yours as well. Thanx. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Noah, as always.... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Startime....thanx lots....decided to give this one a good ending for a change. Wanted to put a smile on a face or two....After the tears of course.... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Walker, yes....I agree with you. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sigh..so do I Sandra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sandra, hope this was a good read for you. I tried to put both sides of emotions in it. With a victory for both loves, in the end... I hope they are good memories.... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Whether the real or the hoped for ending, this was very nice. And since I adore the loons, that part made me smile. May your swinging duet dream be fulfilled. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Yes, I like that ending too. But I always like endings that hint of promise and happiness. Great write If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Midnitesun.....thanx bunches....and I won't forget about the Loons....I love to hear them call in the stillness of a cool morning around sunrise....so peaceful a sound. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Tracey....I had posted a second one earlier that was toooooo sad...and I felt that I needed to put some hope in this one....Most of us enjoy a happy ending... I know I do...and can get really tearyeyed tooo... |
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mutington Member
since 2000-11-29
Posts 132New Jersey, USA |
Glad that I stopped by..... Nice to read your work again. Joyce mutington/joyce "I can live by myself, but not within myself." |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Happy to allow you to have my words. Always have enjoyed your comments. I don't want to break hearts again. |
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