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The Lady of Shallot
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0 posted 2001-10-24 01:15 PM




My eyes open at pre-dawn
thoughts twisted, bothered-
My muse is
no longer physical.

A presence echoes
uneven chants
into the room.
I rise, as I always do.

I hear a whisper steady-
as a fledgling rite.

"Come to bed."

I turn to see....
nothing.

My heart expands
thins,
bursts….

becomes

miasma.





-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

[This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-24-2001).]

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Mistletoe Angel
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1 posted 2001-10-24 01:46 PM


BRAVO!!! Wonderful, sweet friend! (sigh) Your words are always so wonderful to read and touch the heart. (sigh) We're always here if you need someone to talk to, dear friend! (big hugggssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet lady, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Professor Gloom
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of Depression
2 posted 2001-10-24 01:52 PM


Swamp gas ghost,
Drifting in the window of the heart,
From the host,
Casually rips the sad soul apart,
Smell the dank,
From that which was once part of living,
Now has sank,
Removes the soul by lack of giving.

Gloom

jwesley
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3 posted 2001-10-24 01:56 PM


Loved the sentiment here, my friend. Good write.

jwesley

The Lady of Shallot
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4 posted 2001-10-24 02:11 PM


Noah, thank you sweet one.

Prof. Gloom, loved your response, took me a long time to get this one materialized...
please post yours, it's lovely.

JWesley,thank you for reading.



-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

[This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-24-2001).]

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2001-10-24 03:19 PM


SIGH....
Interloper
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Deep in the heart
6 posted 2001-10-24 03:19 PM


and then she awoke
turned to him and snuggled tight
inhaling his scent

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

The Lady of Shallot
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7 posted 2001-10-24 03:24 PM


Sandra,
yes, I know...sigh..thank you

Interloper, yes, I prefer your ending much better....much, much better. Thank you for replying.

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

[This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-24-2001).]

Enchantress
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8 posted 2001-10-24 03:47 PM


Love to hear those words...."Come to bed."
  *sigh*  ~Nancy~

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

JamesMichael
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9 posted 2001-10-24 04:11 PM


I went to the dictionary to look up miasma...this seems like a lonely situation...I know the feeling...hoping for beautiful days and romantic nights for you...James
Magnus
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10 posted 2001-10-24 04:53 PM


Very touching read.  I too am a little
puzzled by that one word....miazma...

The Lady of Shallot
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11 posted 2001-10-24 04:59 PM


Nancy, me too...thank you for replying...

James Michael, yes, it is a lonely poem and feeling, thank you for reading and replying.

Magnus, thank you.....the word means I believe an unhealthy vapor or decaying presence, death....yes, very sad.

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

Duncan
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12 posted 2001-10-24 05:23 PM


Thanks James (he handed me the dictionary).  More powerful than I expected from the title.  I enjoy your style of writing alot.
The Lady of Shallot
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13 posted 2001-10-24 06:03 PM


(smile) Duncan, as long as the two of you are on the same page!  Thank you for reading, I appreciate it!

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

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